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Adolescence always has been and always will be a very difficult time in life. You are lost where
between childhood and adulthood, but still, this is the time in life when you have to break freely from the comformity of your peers to find yourself. Some people argue that it's more difficult to be young today than it used to be. Is this true, and in that case, why?
In modern society teenagers pressure to mature much more quickly than one or two hundred years ago. Today, minors on a very early stage have to make decisions regard education, often bearing upon their future careers. In the past children were expected to follow in the footsteps of their parents, that is to say, the son was supposed to take in the profession of his father, while the daughter was expected to stay at home to take care of domestic duties such as cooking and cleaning
Furthermore, today it's much more difficult to find your place in society. As cities grow, crime increases, and the anonymity people experiment grow as well. It becomes more difficult to find and cultivate your own ideas and values
On the other hand, the adolescence of today have great opportunities than ever before. In the past, if your father was a blacksmith or a farmer, in ten years, so you would be. Today, teenagers have possibility to fulfil in all their dreams and ambitions.
 
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Adolescence always has been and will be a very difficult time period in one’s life. You are lost somewhere between childhood and adulthood, but still this is the time in one’s life when you have to break free from peer pressure to find yourself. It has been argued by some that it is more difficult to be young today than it used to be. Is this true, and if so, why?

Compared to one or two centuries ago, modern teenagers are constantly under pressure to mature much more quickly. Today, youth has to make a decision regarding their education that impacts their future careers at a very early age. This is in contrast with past practices when children were simply expected to follow the footsteps of their parents, with the sons taking over their father’s profession and daughters staying at home to carry on domestic duties such as cooking and cleaning.

It is also much more difficult to find your place in society.
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On the other hand, the adolescents of today have much more opportunities than ever before. In the past, if your father was a blacksmith or a farmer, you could be expected to remain in their shoes upon reaching adulthood. In contrast, modern teenagers are afforded plenty of opportunities to fulfil their dreams and ambitions, and become whoever they wish to be if they are willing to study and work hard for their goal.


 
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