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1. Extended family is a big family that includes not only the parents and children, but also grandparents, uncles, aunt and cousins, all living under the same roof. I like the extended family because i can live with my cousins and grandparents. Firstly, living in extended family is happy. Children develop strong relationships with adults other than parents and they will grow up with their cousins that are the same ages. That sounds interseting. Secondly, the grandparents don't feel lonely because they can look after the grandchildren when their parents are busy at work. However, sometimes they have no privacy because there are so many members, so that is one of the main reasons for a lot of conflicts between different generations. That what i don't like about living in an extended family

 

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1. Extended family is a big family that includes not only the parents and children, but also grandparents, uncles, aunt and cousins, all living under the same roof. I like the extended family because i can live with my cousins and grandparents. Firstly, living in extended family is happy. Children develop strong relationships with adults other than parents and they will grow up with their cousins that are the same ages. That sounds interseting. Secondly, the grandparents don't feel lonely because they can look after the grandchildren when their parents are busy at work. However, sometimes they have no privacy because there are so many members, so that is one of the main reasons for a lot of conflicts between different generations. That what i don't like about living in an extended family

Extended family is a big family that includes not only the parents and children but also grandparents, uncles, aunt, and cousins, all living under the same roof. I like the extended family because I can live with my cousins and grandparents. Firstly, living in an extended family is happy. Children develop strong relationships with adults other than parents and they will grow up with their cousins that are the same ages. That sounds interesting. Secondly, the grandparents don't feel lonely because they can look after their grandchildren when their parents are busy at work. However, sometimes they have no privacy because there are so many members, so that is one of the main reasons for a lot of conflicts between different generations. That what I don't like about living in an extended family.

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