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  1. Lê Quỳnh Phương

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    Living in a traditional family of three or four generations has both advantages and disadvantages. What do you think of that matter? Write an essay of about 180- 200 words to support your points.
    Bài làm
    Family is an indispensible part of society. Some people suppose that living in a big family has both disadvantages and advantages. From my point of view, I agree with this statement for following reasons.

    I believe that living in an extended family has three main benefits. Firstly, family members can have more supports from each other. For example, grandparents can take care of children while their parents are busy. Secondly, the relationship between each member in a big family is more close than that in a nuclear family. Moreover, the children have a great opportunity to develop their social skills and learn how to tackle with the problems because they socialize with other children in the family.

    On the other hand, the drawbacks of a big family also need to be considered. The most and important one is finance. More family members require more living cost, which may place a heavy burden on those who take responsibility for supporting their family. Furthermore, you may have less privacy and less free time. In most cases, you will have to share rooms and sacrifice your time to do something you are told to do. Last but not least, with so many people living under one roof, it is difficult to pay attention to the individual members

    In conclusion, the advantages of living in a big family appear to be greater than the disadvantages. There may be less money but members from a tight relationship can help each other when they have tough problems.
    Các bạn, các tiền bối sửa hộ em bài này với.:p
    @Phạm Dương @Tuấn Anh Phan Nguyễn
     
  2. Nguyễn Phan Ánh Nguyệt

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    Theo e là như thế này, Chị tham khảo:
    Family is an indispensible part of society. Some people firmly believe that living in a big family has both disadvantages and advantages. From my point of view, I agree with this statement for the following reasons. I believe that living in an extended family has three main benefits. Firstly, family members can both provide and receive support from each other. For example, grandparents can take care of the children while their parents are busy. Secondly, the relationship between each member in a big family is tighter than that in a nuclear family. Moreover, the children have a great opportunity to develop their social skills and learn how to tackle problems effectively because they socialize with other children in the family. On the other hand, the drawbacks of a big family are also needed to be considered. The most and important one is finance. More family members have higher living cost, which may place a heavy burden on those who take responsibility in supporting their family. Furthermore, you may have less privacy and less free time. In most cases, you will have to share rooms and sacrifice your time to do something you are told to do. Last but not the least, with so many people living under one roof, it is difficult to give equal attention to all individual members. In conclusion, the advantages of living in a big family appear to be greater than the disadvantages. There may be less money but members from a strong bond can help the members of the family combat and win against tough adversities in life.
    CHÚC CHỊ HỌC TỐT ^.^
     
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  3. Khánh Hồ Bá

    Khánh Hồ Bá Học sinh chăm học Thành viên

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    Family is an indispensiable part of society. Some people suppose that living in a big family has both disadvantages and advantages. From my view point of view, I agree with this statement for following reasons.

    I believe that living in an extended family has three main benefits. Firstly, family members can have more supports from each other. For example, grandparents can take care of children while their parents are busy. Secondly, the relationship between each member in a big family is more close than that in a nuclear family. Moreover, the children have a great opportunity to develop their social skills and learn how to tackledeal with the problems because they socialize with other children in the family.

    On the other hand, the drawbacks of a big family also need to be considered. The most and important one is finance. More family members means that require more living costs, which may place a heavy burden on those who take responsibility for supporting their family. Furthermore, you may have less privacy and less free time. In most cases, you will have to share rooms and sacrifice your time to do something you are told to do. Last but not least, with so many people living under one roof, it is difficult to pay attention to the individual members

    In conclusion, the advantages of living in a big family appear to be greater than the disadvantages. There may be less money but members from a tight relationship can help each other when they have tough problems
    em có dùng phần mềm để sửa và có một số lỗi, em cũng giúp chị sửa lại rồi nha
    Chúc chị học tốt :D
     

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  4. Lê Quỳnh Phương

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    cho mình hỏi, bạn dùng phần mềm sửa lỗi gì ạ? Có mất phí không?
     
  5. Khánh Hồ Bá

    Khánh Hồ Bá Học sinh chăm học Thành viên

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    Em dùng Write and Improve ấy ạ
    Trang này dùng để luyện viết
    để em giới thiệu thêm :)))
     
  6. Lê Uyên Nhii

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    em có biết trang web grammarly sửa lỗi từ và ngữ pháp nè
     
  7. Lê Quỳnh Phương

    Lê Quỳnh Phương Học sinh chăm học Thành viên

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    Mình cũng từng dùng Grammarly. Nhưng cái này chỉ sửa được những lỗi ngữ pháp cơ bản. Mình muốn tránh những lỗi ngữ pháp cơ bản, đồng thời cũng muốn tránh lặp từ. Mà dùng nguyên Grammarly thì không ổn
     
  8. Khánh Hồ Bá

    Khánh Hồ Bá Học sinh chăm học Thành viên

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    Trang Write and Improve sửa toàn bộ, định mức và chỉ lỗi cực kì chi tiết chị nhé
     
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  9. Hà Việt Sơn

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    Living in a traditional family of three or four generations has both advantages and disadvantages. What do you think of that matter? Write an essay of about 180- 200 words to support your points.
    Bài làm
    Family is an indispensable part of society. Some people suppose that living in a big family has both disadvantages and advantages. From my point of view, I agree with this statement for the following reasons.

    I believe that living in an extended family has three main benefits. Firstly, family members can have more supports from each other. For example, grandparents can take care of children while their parents are busy. Secondly, the relationship between each member of a big family is more close than that in a nuclear family. Moreover, the children have a great opportunity to develop their social skills and learn how to tackle with the problems because they socialize with other children in the family.

    On the other hand, the drawbacks of a big family also need to be considered. The most and important one is finance. More family members require more living costs, which may place a heavy burden on those who take responsibility for supporting their families. Furthermore, you may have less privacy and less free time. In most cases, you will have to share rooms and sacrifice your time to do something you are told to do. Last but not least, with so many people living under one roof, it is difficult to pay attention to the individual members

    In conclusion, the advantages of living in a big family appear to be greater than the disadvantages. There may be less money but members from a tight relationship can help each other when they have tough problems.

    Bài này mình sửa ban đầu có khoảng 10 lỗi nhưng mình chỉ kịp sửa có 5 thôi nhé bạn bài này mình cho 95 / 100
    Reason
    +) Chất văn khá formal
    +) Có sự optimistic và bà viết khá friendly
    Lời khuyên nhỏ : bạn nên dung Grammarly for Chrome nhé, nó sẽ chấm điểm bài văn của bạn + sửa lỗi (tầm 50% - 60% nếu bạn ko phải premium)
     
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