[English] Luyện viết các bài luận, bài văn tiếng Anh

[nh0c_bee_95]

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Topic này dc lập nhằm giúp các bạn luyện tập phần viết 1 bài luận hoặc 1 bài văn bằng tiếng Anh.
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Mong các bạn tham gia nhiệt tình.

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- Do you agree or disagree with the statement " We shouldn't use examination results to assess a student's ability because they are unfair indications. "?

- Advantages and disadvantages of living in a big city.

- " Internet is the most wonderful thing for our life. " To what extent to you agree or disagree with this statement.

 

[nh0c_bee_95]

- Do you agree or disagree with the statement " We shouldn't use examination results to assess a student's ability because they are unfair indications. "?

I’m a student so I’m trying to get the results as good as possible. I think majority of students like me. So the examination results are very important to us because they show our abilities. But the rest of students don’t think like this. They are unfair indications in studying. So with them, we shouldn’t use examination results to assess their abilities. I both agree and disagree with using examination results to assess student’s abilitiy.
- Fistly, with studious pupils, they have studied very hardly to got good results so using examination results to assess their abilities is true.
- Secondly, with lazy students, they study deceitfully. Their results are relied on their family authorities or money. So using examination results to assess their abilities is unfair, is really false.
I can’t agree or disagree totally with the statement " We shouldn't use examination results to assess a student's ability because they are unfair indications. ”
According to cercumstance, we just can use examination results to assess a student's ability.


~~> Mình thấy có vẻ nó hơi lạc thì phải. :|
Các bạn đọc và góp y giùm mình. Tks Mình đang rất cần củng cố kĩ năng viết.

 

[jeremyz]

Một vài lỗi ngữ pháp...Nhìu chữ quá, nhìn qua thui

 

[heocoipro]

I’m a student so I’m trying to get the results as good as possible. I think majority of students like me. So the examination results are very important to us because they show our abilities. But the rest of students don’t think like this. They are unfair indications in studying. So with them, we shouldn’t use examination results to assess their abilities. I both agree and disagree with using examination results to assess student’s abilitiy.
- Fistly, with studious pupils, they have studied very hardly to got good results so using examination results to assess their abilities is true.
- Secondly, with lazy students, they study deceitfully. Their results are relied on their family authorities or money. So using examination results to assess their abilities is unfair, is really false.
I can’t agree or disagree totally with the statement " We shouldn't use examination results to assess a student's ability because they are unfair indications. ”
According to cercumstance, we just can use examination results to assess a student's ability.


~~> Mình thấy có vẻ nó hơi lạc thì phải. :|
Các bạn đọc và góp y giùm mình. Tks Mình đang rất cần củng cố kĩ năng viết.

Theo mình thì bạn quá thiên về việc nghĩ tiếng việt rồi đơn thuần dịch qua tiếng anh. Bạn cũng ko nên chia nhỏ câu ra quá nhiều vì sẽ làm mất đi tính chất của một bài luận. Mình nghĩ bạn bị văn nói ảnh hưởng quá nhiều vào văn viết rồi.
VD như đoạn bạn viết: I’m a student so I’m trying to get the results as good as possible. I think majority of students like me. Câu này mình nghĩ có thể viết khác đi một chút: I'm a student now and like many other students, I always try to get the best studying result.
Hì. Chỉ dám góp ý vậy thôi. Mình cũng k luyện phần writing nhiều nên cũng ko biết viết sao cho hay.

 

[nh0c_bee_95]

Mình sẽ cố gắng hơn. Tks bạn

- " Internet is the most wonderful thing for our life. " To what extent to you agree or disagree with this statement.

Nowadays, the advanced technology is very important for us to develop in every aspect. And the Internet is one of the most wonderful thing for our life.
- Firstly, the Internet as a source of information such as news, articles, weather forecast, study documents,…
- Secondly, the Internet as a source of education. We can study through on-line school, on-line lessons,…
- Thirdly, the Internet as a source of entertainment. We can relax after hard days by musics, movies, games,…
- Finally, the Internet also helps us communicate with our friends and relatives by means of chatting, e-mail or blog.
For me, the Internet is the most wonderful thing of modern life.
According to Internet, we can do many things.
So why don’t we use the Internet?



~~> Góp ý hen

 

[heocoipro]

Mình sẽ cố gắng hơn. Tks bạn



Nowadays, the advanced technology is very important for us to develop in every aspect. And the Internet is one of the most wonderful thing for our life.
- Firstly, the Internet as a source of information such as news, articles, weather forecast, study documents,…
- Secondly, the Internet as a source of education. We can study through on-line school, on-line lessons,…
- Thirdly, the Internet as a source of entertainment. We can relax after hard days by musics, movies, games,…
- Finally, the Internet also helps us communicate with our friends and relatives by means of chatting, e-mail or blog.
For me, the Internet is the most wonderful thing of modern life.
According to Internet, we can do many things.
So why don’t we use the Internet?



~~> Góp ý hen

Các ý của bạn đều đúng, mình cũng ko góp thêm đc ý j. Nhưng theo mình vì câu hỏi là "to what extent do you agree o disagree?" nên ở phần mở bài bạn cần nói rõ bạn agree or disagree và ở mức độ nào (Theo mình ở đây bạn đang thể hiện đồng ý hoàn toàn), đừng để đến phần mở bài.
Một vài lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ trong bài như: one of the most wonderful thing(s).
Và nếu trong một bài essay mang tính chất formal thì ko nên viết:
So why don’t we use the Internet?

 

[nguyet_ha2709]

[English]Luyện viết các bài luận,bài văn tiếng anh

Some student,they available intelligence so they can muster so much to their life.Sometimes, a few student have burst out of intelligence or they call luckly.Many student have create.They read a lots of books and know how is muster to life.So exam people are not unfair.but we can say: we should't use examation result to assess a student's ability
=> Pyn mới học lớp 8 nên chưa học đc nhỳu...mong mọi ng` giúp em với....tks nhỳu ạ!!!

 

[heocoipro]

Some student,they available intelligence so they can muster so much to their life.Sometimes, a few student have burst out of intelligence or they call luckly.Many student have create.They read a lots of books and know how is muster to life.So exam people are not unfair.but we can say: we should't use examation result to assess a student's ability
=> Pyn mới học lớp 8 nên chưa học đc nhỳu...mong mọi ng` giúp em với....tks nhỳu ạ!!!

Em ko nên dịch từ tiếng việt sang tiếng anh 1 cách đơn thuần như vậy.
VD như câu:
Some student,they available intelligence so they can muster so much to their life.
Câu này văn nói có thể chấp nhận đc nhưng văn viết thì ko. Hơn nữa, "they available intelligence" hoàn toàn tối nghĩa. Theo chị nếu em ko biết viết thì có thể viết đơn giản: "Some students are intelligent so they can muster ...." hoặc đơn giản hơn "some intelligent students can...."
"Many student have create" \Rightarrow trong văn viết, ko thể viết thế này. Em phải nói ra là created (pp em nhá) cái j.
"a lots of books" \Rightarrow "a lot of books"
"They read a lots of books and know how is muster to life" \Rightarrow Theo chị nên viết: They read a lot of books and have great knowledge about the world around so they know how and what to muster....
"So exam people are not unfair.but we can say: we should't use examation result to assess a student's ability" \Rightarrow 1 câu khó hiểu em ah.
Tóm lại là khá nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp cơ bản và chưa làm rõ đc ý của em.
Cố gắng hơn em nhé.

 

[nh0c_bee_95]

Nguyên văn bởi nguyet_ha2709
Some student,they available intelligence so they can muster so much to their life.Sometimes, a few student have burst out of intelligence or they call luckly.Many student have create.They read a lots of books and know how is muster to life.So exam people are not unfair.but we can say: we should't use examation result to assess a student's ability

Đúng là có khá nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Những lỗi cơ bản như
Some student ~~> phải là số nhiều ( some students )
a lots of ~~> a lot of
Many students have create ~~> thì HTHT nên phải dùng pp ( created )
ở câu cuối, dùng từ nối "but" k hề thích hợp, khi muốn nêu ra ý kiến và khẳng định ý kiến đó em dùng "so" . Và theo chị, k nên dùng "we can say :... "để khẳng định ý kiến của em mà nên dùng "I think...".

 

[tuansando]

[T_T] Mình đang rối bùng lên vì bị bắt phải viết 1 bài văn, giới thiệu cho nhóm mình. VD như là nhóm mình đến từ đâu, cầm tinh con gì. Rồi bắt đầu giới thiệu từng người (cái này thì đơn giản). Mấy bạn bày cho mình cách giới thiệu nào hay hay, nói chung là nó hài hước, hóm hỉnh 1 tí xíu ( dạng như là nói sai rồi nói lại, rồi thêm mấy từ phụ họa theo mỗi người. VD: Lâm - tọc mạch. Huyền - ngố ..v..v). Mình ko rành lắm bên phần này. Mong được sự giúp đỡ của mọi người từ học mãi. ^^

 

[nh0c_bee_95]

1 bài văn giới thiệu nhóm mà cần tính hài hước à.?!
Mình nghĩ nếu là thuyết trình trc' đám đông thì bạn nên dủng những tấm hình riêng của mỗi người cho mỗi phần giới thiệu của riêng người đó. Trên những bức hình đó thì có kèm theo ghi chú gì đó vui vui.
Còn cái mà nói sai nói lại thì mình nghĩ là k nên. Đâu phải ai cũng biết bạn cố ý làm vậy mà khi nghe họ chị biết bạn đang nói vấp vì thế hãy nghĩ cách káhc để gây kcịh tính, hoàn toàn k nên dùng cách giả vờ nói sai rồi nói lai.
Muốn tăng thêm thú vị, sao bạn k thử cùng nhóm của mình chế 1 bài vè, thơ hoặc 1 đoạn nhạc để phần giới thiệu thêm lôi cuốn.!? ( việc này thì hơi khó nhằn )
....nói chung cũng có nhiều cách để gây hài hước cho phần giới thiệu,...
Good Luck To You.!

 

[tuansando]

Bày cho mình vài từ dạng như tiếng lóng. Chẳng hạn như: tọc mạch, ngốc xít, ngố..v.v.v. (mấy cái đó cũng để nghi chú đó.)

 

[kun11]

cho mình nói vài cậu tíng anh với nhé! ^.^ I say the country life. Country life is simple. The people are friendly and the air is fresh and quiet. There are lots of small houses. The roads are narrow and dirty.
có chỗ nào sai sửa hộ mình nha! Cám ơn trước.

 

[nh0c_bee_95]

I say about the country life. Country life is simple. The people are friendly and the air is fresh and quiet. There are lots of small houses. The roads are narrow and dirty.

bạn dùng nhiều chỗ chưa thích hợp lắm.
Ng` ta hay nói cuộc sống ở nông thôn thì yên tĩnh, thanh bình " The life in country is quiet and peaceful. " nhưng bạn lại nói "the air is fresh and quiet", the air k dùng quiet nhé.
Nếu nói về 1 bài luận thì bài của bạn còn thiếu sót nhiều ý lắm.

 

[hatung94]

You have decided to give several hours of your time each month to improve the community where you live. What is the one thing you will do to improve your community? Why?

In my neighborhood, the streets are very dirty and this makes everyone feel uncomfortable each time going out. Therefore, the one thing I will do to ỉmprove my community is to keep these streets clean.

The reason streets are very dirty in my neighborhood is that people always pump garbage on them. They drop litter everywhere but never put them in trashcans. Some people also let their dogs dirt on the streets and it makes them terribly dirty, especially on rainy days. Moreover these dogs sometime bite people and because of this, i'm very afraid of going out.

To deal with this situation, I plan to set up a group in order keep the streets in my neighborhood clean and members will be my neighbors. Joining my group, They will have to assure and devote time to keep the streets clean. Members also have to let their dogs dirt in the right places.If break the rules, they will not have to pay fine but have to spend more time on group's activities.

I can say for certain that my group will contribute a lot to keep my community clean. There will be no garbage, no dogs dirt. The streets become clean and people will feel much comfortable.


Although there are some difficulties at first like asking people to join..., I'm sure that my group will work out and my community will appreciate it.


b-( bài luận như shit

 

[nh0c_bee_95]

You have decided to give several hours of your time each month to improve the community where you live. What is the one thing you will do to improve your community? Why?

In my neighborhood, the streets are very dirty and this makes everyone feel uncomfortable each time going out. Therefore, the one thing I will do to ỉmprove my community is to keep these streets clean.

The reason streets are very dirty in my neighborhood is that people always pump garbage on them. They drop litter everywhere but never put them in trashcans. Some people also let their dogs dirt on the streets and it makes them terribly dirty, especially on rainy days. Moreover these dogs sometime bite people and because of this, i'm very afraid of going out.

To deal with this situation, I plan to set up a group in order keep the streets in my neighborhood clean and members will be my neighbors. Joining my group, They will have to assure and devote time to keep the streets clean. Members also have to let their dogs dirt in the right places.If break the rules, they will not have to pay fine but have to spend more time on group's activities.

I can say for certain that my group will contribute a lot to keep my community clean. There will be no garbage, no dogs dirt. The streets become clean and people will feel much comfortable.


Although there are some difficulties at first like asking people to join..., I'm sure that my group will work out and my community will appreciate it.


b-( bài luận như shit

What do you mean?

 

[anhvanteo189]

cac pan cpa the help mjh hoc ah vsn tot hon ko?
mjh puc nay hoc sut anh van han di!!!
pun wa
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[nh0c_bee_95]

cac pan cpa the help mjh hoc ah vsn tot hon ko?

mjh puc nay hoc sut anh van han di!!!
pun wa
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còn nếu những khi rảnh thì bạn cố gắng tìm trong box anh các topic về ngữ pháp, cấu trúc, từ vựng... như thế cũng rất tốt.

 

[nh0c_bee_95]

1 chủ đề cũng rất hay.

- Adventages of reading books.

 

[lennihollander]

Về advantages of living in a big city:
Nowadays, most of young people prefer to live in big cities. So which place is better to live? Let’s think about them.
What are the advantages when you live in a big city? In my opinion, there are a lot of advantages such as: convenience, an opportunity to improve your knowledge and developing career.
In a big city has every thing you want. There are a lot of trade centers which you to buy the essential things for life such as: clothes, furniture and foods which have high standard and good for health. Working in a big city, you are usually tensed by pressures of work after day you can go to the entertainment centers for relax or walk around the parks where are interesting places and bring our to refresh. You also take a short time to get there because the public transport is quite good. You can go any where by bus, train, plane…Specially, if you have an emergency or diseases you will easily find any hospital in the city near your place.
On the other hand, living in a big city people have a lot chances to improve your knowledge. There are a lot of famous schools and university for you to learn. Indeed, in a big city have many people come from countries. You will not only learn their language but also know well about many different cultures from their activities day. This is very good for you! Last but not need, in a big city has a lot of companies, corporations and businesses… they bring for you a lot of opportunities to find a good job with high salary. A better working environment will support for your promotion in the future.
To sum up, I would like to say that living in a big city has many advantages. I’ll stay here till I retire when I would like to go another place to have a rest. Do you think that?