People say that television has changed the quality of life for ordinary people. First, TV update breaking news regularly in various aspects of life by broadcast around the clock so the business, education and other fields have chances to change their life. Moreover, financial news help business-traders earn more money to improve their life by information from news about the stock market, gold price, doing investment or signing contracts. Furthermore, television can provide us knowledge about storms, floods, mudslides, and how to prevent or solve weather problems by the weather forecast and we can save their life stay away from ruined crop failure. Second, Tv is an entertainment device for people from all walks of life. People can range from news to game shows, from music to movies but it is very cheap for everybody. Television helps us have good health of spiritual life, refresh the mind, enrich the soul and it changes the standard of living completely @Nguyễn Phan Ánh Nguyệt check lỗi ngữ pháp giùm mình với, cảm ơn nhìu nha
People say that television has changed the quality of life for ordinary people. First, TV update breaking news regularly in various aspects of life by broadcast around the clock so the business, education and other fields have chances to change their life. Moreover, financial news help business-traders earn more money to improve their life by information from news about the stock market, gold price, doing investment or signing contracts. Furthermore, television can provide us knowledge about storms, floods, mudslides, and how to prevent or solve weather problems by the weather forecast and we can save their life stay away from ruined crop failure. Second, Tv is an entertainment device for people from all walks of life. People can range from news to game shows, from music to movies but it is very cheap for everybody. Television helps us have good health of spiritual life, refresh the mind, enrich the soul and it changes the standard of living completely. Xét về ngữ pháp thì ok! Còn xét về phần viết bài thì mình thấy với cái bài này thì cậu nên viết cả advantages and disadvantages của TV. Bài này cậu mới chỉ nêu được mỗi advantages của TV, cậu còn có thể nêu thêm về disadvantages chẳng hạn như: "Because TV is considered as an enticing reaction time for many, some people are addicted to TV and watch it every day. As a result, those people become gradually less physically active." Và thêm phần kết như: "In conclusion, the introduction of TV has brought many changes to human's life in both negative and positive directions."
Tại đề bài của mình là "Television has changed the quality of life for the ordinary person. Do you agree or disagree?" Với đề bài này thì mình nghĩ chỉ cần triển khai theo 1 hướng là đồng ý hoặc không đồng ý. Bài làm của mình là đồng ý nên mình chỉ nói về advantages
Cậu thử kham thảo nhớ! People say that television has changed the quality of life for ordinary people. First, TV update => updates breaking news regularly => chuyển lên trước updates in => about various aspects of life by broadcast => broadcasting around the clock so the business, education and other fields have chances to change their life=> lives (tránh lặp từ). Moreover, financial news help business=> bỏ traders earn more money to improve their life by information from news about the stock market, gold price =>prices, doing investment =>investments or signing contracts. Furthermore, television can provide us with knowledge about storms, floods, mudslides, and how to prevent or solve weather problems by the weather forecast and we can save their life stay away from ruined crop failure. Second, Tv is an entertainment device for people from all walks of life. People can range from news to game shows, from music to movies but it is very cheap for everybody. Television helps us have good health of spiritual life, refresh the mind=> spirit, enrich the soul and it changes the standard of living completely => chuyển sau it nhé
h u h u, giờ mới nhớ ra để sửa nè, xin lũi bae nho, cậu tham khảo thử nha: People say that television has changed the quality of life for ordinary people. First, TV update breaking news regularly in various aspects of life by broadcast around the clock, so (1) the business, education and other fields have chances to change their life. Moreover, financial news help ⇒ helps (2) business-traders ⇒ business traders (3) earn more money to improve their life ⇒ lives (4) by information from news about the stock market, gold price, doing investment ⇒ making an investment / making investments(5), or signing contracts. Furthermore, television can provide us knowledge about storms, floods, mudslides, and how to prevent or solve weather problems by the weather forecast and we can save their life stay away from ruined crop failure. Second, TV is an entertainment device for people from all walks of life. People can range from news to game shows, from music to movies but it is very cheap for everybody. Television helps us have good health of spiritual life, refresh the mind, enrich the soul and it changes the standard of living completely 1. Trước so cần bổ sung dấu "," 2. financial news không đếm được chia động từ theo số ít 3. business traders không cần dấu gạch nối 4. their là tính từ sở hữu của they là số nhiều, danh từ đi cùng nó cũng số nhiều nên lives phù hợp hơn 5. doing investment không phù hợp, nên chuyển động từ thành making an investment hoặc investments
