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The memories of the first day of school when entering grade 1 I still remember as in. Early in the morning my mother called me up to prepare for personal hygiene and breakfast. Finished, her mother was dressed in neat white clothes and put on a new pair she bought for her on the day of school. Mother told me to be polite greeting when meeting with teachers. When I arrived at school, my younger siblings were eagerly awaiting class with new friends. On the first day of school in the autumn of autumn, the clear blue sky and the cool breeze left behind me a beautiful memory of the distance students.

 

[shirona]

The memories of the first day of school when entering grade 1 I still remember as in. Early in the morning my mother called me up to prepare for personal hygiene and breakfast. Finished, her mother was dressed in neat white clothes and put on a new pair she bought for her on the day of school. Mother told me to be polite greeting when meeting with teachers. When I arrived at school, my younger siblings were eagerly awaiting class with new friends. On the first day of school in the autumn of autumn, the clear blue sky and the cool breeze left behind me a beautiful memory of the distance students.

bạn xem lại câu này nhé: "her mother was dressed in neat white clothes and put on a new pair she bought for her on the day of school".

 

[Người Bên Em]

bạn xem lại câu này nhé: "her mother was dressed in neat white clothes and put on a new pair she bought for her on the day of school".

she

 

[shirona]

The memories of the first day of school when entering grade 1 I still remember as in. Early in the morning my mother called me up to prepare for personal hygiene and breakfast. Finished, her mother was dressed in neat white clothes and put on a new pair she bought for her on the day of school. Mother told me to be polite greeting when meeting with teachers. When I arrived at school, my younger siblings were eagerly awaiting class with new friends. On the first day of school in the autumn of autumn, the clear blue sky and the cool breeze left behind me a beautiful memory of the distance students.

mình nghĩ bạn nên thay chỗ: "of the distance students" thành "
of the first day of school" sẽ hay hơn )

 

[shirona]

she

ơ! phải là " my" chứ.

 

[Người Bên Em]

ơ! phải là " my" chứ.

her mother là mẹ của cô ấy sao dùng my chỗ sau đc

 

[shirona]

her mother là mẹ của cô ấy sao dùng my chỗ sau đc

cái này là đnag viết về mình mà. chứ "cô ấy" ở đây ra

 

[S I M O]

The memories of the first day of school when entering grade 1 I still remember as in. Early in the morning my mother called me up to prepare for personal hygiene and breakfast. Finished, her mother was dressed in neat white clothes and put on a new pair she bought for her on the day of school. Mother told me to be polite greeting when meeting with teachers. When I arrived at school, my younger siblings were eagerly awaiting class with new friends. On the first day of school in the autumn of autumn, the clear blue sky and the cool breeze left behind me a beautiful memory of the distance students.

The memories of the first day of school when entering grade 1 I still remember as in(I still remember the memories of the first school's day when entering grade 1). Early in the morning my mother called me up (woke me up) to prepare for personal hygiene and breakfast. Finished( After I finished), her mother was dressed in neat white clothes and put on a new pair she bought for her on(for) the day of school. Mother told me to be polite greeting (greeting politely) when meeting with (Bỏ) teachers. When I arrived at school, my younger siblings were eagerly awaiting class with new friends. On the first day of school in the autumn of autumn (On the first day at school), the clear blue sky and the cool breeze left behind (gave) me a beautiful memory of the distance students (student ages)

Tô đỏ = cần sửa
Tô xanh = có thể tham khảo

 

[TajSaker]

The memories of the first day of school when entering grade 1 I still remember as in.
=> Chỗ này thừa bạn nhé, nên bỏ "when entering grade 1"
=> "As in" mình không hiểu lắm, nếu ý bạn là nhớ rất rõ thì sửa thành "Still remember vividly"

Early in the morning my mother called me up to prepare for personal hygiene and breakfast.
=> Call sb up dễ bị hiểu nhầm là gọi điện thoại lắm bạn nhé, nên sửa thành "Woke me up"

Finished, her mother was dressed in neat white clothes and put on a new pair she bought for her on the day of school.
=> After I finished/ had finished
=> New pair of...?
=> Ý bạn là mẹ bạn mặc quần áo trắng và mang gì đó hay là giúp bạn mặc những cái đó?

Mother told me to be polite greeting when meeting with teachers.
=> to be polite and to greet
=> bỏ with

When I arrived at school, my younger siblings were eagerly awaiting class with new friends.
=> with their new friends

On the first day of school in the autumn of autumn, the clear blue sky and the cool breeze left behind me a beautiful memory of the distance students.
=> In autumn
=> gave me/ jogged my memory about
=> Chỗ distance of students mình chưa hiểu ý bạn lắm

 

[trần hiểu vy]

The memories of the first day of school when entering grade 1 I still remember as in.
=> Chỗ này thừa bạn nhé, nên bỏ "when entering grade 1"
=> "As in" mình không hiểu lắm, nếu ý bạn là nhớ rất rõ thì sửa thành "Still remember vividly"

Early in the morning my mother called me up to prepare for personal hygiene and breakfast.
=> Call sb up dễ bị hiểu nhầm là gọi điện thoại lắm bạn nhé, nên sửa thành "Woke me up"

Finished, her mother was dressed in neat white clothes and put on a new pair she bought for her on the day of school.
=> After I finished/ had finished
=> New pair of...?
=> Ý bạn là mẹ bạn mặc quần áo trắng và mang gì đó hay là giúp bạn mặc những cái đó?

Mother told me to be polite greeting when meeting with teachers.
=> to be polite and to greet
=> bỏ with

When I arrived at school, my younger siblings were eagerly awaiting class with new friends.
=> with their new friends

On the first day of school in the autumn of autumn, the clear blue sky and the cool breeze left behind me a beautiful memory of the distance students.
=> In autumn
=> gave me/ jogged my memory about
=> Chỗ distance of students mình chưa hiểu ý bạn lắm

một số chỗ mình viết chưa rõ ý (nhờ bạn sửa giúp mình)
-mẹ mặc cho em bộ quần áo trắng tinh tươm và khoác chiếc cặp mới mẹ đã mua cho em nhân ngày khai giảng
-distance student:suốt quãng đường sinh viên của mình
bạn sửa giúp mình nhé.thanks

 

[trần hiểu vy]

The memories of the first day of school when entering grade 1 I still remember as in(I still remember the memories of the first school's day when entering grade 1). Early in the morning my mother called me up (woke me up) to prepare for personal hygiene and breakfast. Finished( After I finished), her mother was dressed in neat white clothes and put on a new pair she bought for her on(for) the day of school. Mother told me to be polite greeting (greeting politely) when meeting with (Bỏ) teachers. When I arrived at school, my younger siblings were eagerly awaiting class with new friends. On the first day of school in the autumn of autumn (On the first day at school), the clear blue sky and the cool breeze left behind (gave) me a beautiful memory of the distance students (student ages)

Tô đỏ = cần sửa
Tô xanh = có thể tham khảo

bạn ơi có 1 vài chỗ mình muốn viết thế này bạn sửa giúp mình nhé:
-ngày đầu tiên đi học trong sáng mùa thu tháng 9,bầu trời trong xanh và gió mát trong lành đã để lại trong em bao kỉ niệm đẹp về quãng đường học sinh.cảm ơn bạn nhiều

 

[S I M O]

bạn ơi có 1 vài chỗ mình muốn viết thế này bạn sửa giúp mình nhé:
-ngày đầu tiên đi học trong sáng mùa thu tháng 9,bầu trời trong xanh và gió mát trong lành đã để lại trong em bao kỉ niệm đẹp về quãng đường học sinh.cảm ơn bạn nhiều

The first day at school in the September,The blue sky and the fresh wind gave me a lot of unforgettable memories about the time being an student.