a person you love best

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There are four people in my family : my father , my mother, my younger brother and I. All members love together and I love them so much. My mother is an important person for me , she always besides me to protect me from bulllies. Everyone comments her to be the best mother.
My mother is not tall but she is healthy. In her childhood, she studied well so everyone admired her. And so do I. Now, she is a teacher, she teaches in a primary school. She loves the children who are taught by her.
At school, she is an industrious mother, industrious wife. She always helps me in my learning. I learn a lot from her. For me, . she is a perfectionist person in my heart. I love my mother so much.

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[quyettam1123]

There are four people in my family : my father , my mother, my younger brother and I. All members love together and I love them so much. My mother is an important person for me , she always besides me to protect me from bulllies. Everyone comments her to be the best mother.
My mother is not tall but she is healthy. In her childhood, she studied well so everyone admired her. And so do I. Now, she is a teacher, she teaches in a primary school. She loves the children who are taught by her.
At school, she is an industrious mother, industrious wife. She always helps me in my learning. I learn a lot from her. For me, . she is a perfectionist person in my heart. I love my mother so much.

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[thien0526]

There are four people in my family : my father , my mother (my parents), my younger brother and me. All members We love together each other and I love them so much and I love my mother best. My mother is an important person, for me. She always besides stand by me to protect me from bullies. Everyone comments her to be the best mother. Everyone realizes/finds that she is a good mother
My mother is not tall but she is healthy. In her childhood, she studied very well, so everyone admired her. And so do I. Now, she is a teacher, she teaches in a primary school. She loves the children who are taught by her whom she teaches.
At After school, she is an industrious(hard-working) mother, industrious wife. She always helps me in my learning. I learn a lot many things from her. For me, she is a perfectionist perfect person in my heart. And I love my mother her so much.
(Chưa diễn đạt được ý industrious wife)

Nói chung bài của bạn mắc khá nhiều lỗi, cả ngữ pháp lẫn cách dùng từ. Bạn có thể dựa trên những gợi ý ấy để làm lại bài hoàn thiện hơn. Chúc bạn học tốt.

 

[kimajoongah]

There are four people in my family : my father , my mother, my younger brother and I. All members love together and I love them so much. My mother is an important person to me , she always beside me to protect me from the bullies. Everyone comments her to be the best mother.
My mother is not tall but she is healthy. In her childhood, she had studied very well so everyone admired her. And so do I. Now, she is a teacher, she teaches in a primary school. She loves the children who have been taught by her.
After school, she is an industrious mother, industrious wife. She always helps me with my learning. I have learnt a lot from her. To me, she is a perfect person in my heart. I love my mother so much.

SỬA LỖI GIÙM BÀI LUẬN NÀY

Mình không biết chương trình bạn học đến đâu rồi, nhưng mình nghĩ nếu bạn đã học Present perfect và Past perfect tenses thì nên dùng nó ở một số câu cho hợp lí hơn.
Về câu "Everyone comments her to be the best mother.", có lẽ bạn nên viết theo cách khác cho hay hơn, thay vì "Mọi người nhận xét bà là một bà mẹ tốt nhất", bạn có thể viết "Mọi người đều nói bà là một bà mẹ tốt" chẳng hạn.
Còn câu "so do I", vì vế trước dùng thì quá khứ nên có lẽ chỗ này dùng "do" chưa được phù hợp lắm. Nhưng mình cũng chưa nghĩ ra cách nào hay hơn, đành để các bạn khác giỏi hơn vậy nhé!
Đây là ý kiến riêng của mình, hy vọng có thể giúp được bạn

 

[nhatvy2606]

There are four people in my family : my father , my mother (my parents), my younger brother and me. All members We love together each other and I love them so much and I love my mother best. My mother is an important person, for me. She always besides stand by me to protect me from bullies. Everyone comments her to be the best mother. Everyone realizes/finds that she is a good mother
My mother is not tall but she is healthy. In her childhood, she studied very well, so everyone admired her. And so do I. Now, she is a teacher, she teaches in a primary school. She loves the children who are taught by her whom she teaches.
At After school, she is an industrious(hard-working) mother, industrious wife. She always helps me in my learning. I learn a lot many things from her. For me, she is a perfectionist perfect person in my heart. And I love my mother her so much.
(Chưa diễn đạt được ý industrious wife)

Nói chung bài của bạn mắc khá nhiều lỗi, cả ngữ pháp lẫn cách dùng từ. Bạn có thể dựa trên những gợi ý ấy để làm lại bài hoàn thiện hơn. Chúc bạn học tốt.

Nên dùng each other hay one another nhỉ?!
Important(adj) thì đi với giới từ to chứ nhỉ?
Nếu bạn Thiên chuyển besides \Rightarrow stand by thì phải có "s" ở sau stand nhé. Hoặc cũng có thể chuyển theo cách sau:
She is always by my side to....

Everyone comments her to be the best mother.

\Rightarrow She is said to be the best mother.

She always helps me in my learning.

\Rightarrow help đi với giới từ "with".

Các câu còn lại thì khá ổn rồi, chỉ cần trau chuốt them lời văn cho nó mượt mà hơn. Không phải khi nào viết quá thật cũng tốt.

 

[endless_life]

My mother is an important person in my life for many reasons. She is a strong woman, very intelligent, and has a great heart. First, my mother is a strong woman that always fights for what she wants. She believes that in life nothing comes easily. For example, she had to raise my brothers and I by herself due to the fact that my father was always traveling because of his type of work. She had a job, took care of us, and still found time to go to school.Next, I admire my mother because of her intelligence. She is a very smart and well educated woman. She loves to read, and she also writes a lot. For example, she keeps a journal where she writes a little bit about everything including politics, religion, food, and much more. She likes to keep her mind busy, and she also likes to be informed about things that happen in the world.Most important of all, she has a great heart. She is always trying to help everyone. For instance, every year she participates in voluntary events. She helps families to find jobs, collects food, books, and clothes for the poor. In addition, she is an amazing mother; a sweet and loving mother that is always here for us.In conclusion, for these reasons I think my mother is a great person, and she inspires me a lot because she is very strong, intelligent, and has a great heart.