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talk about advantages and disadvantages of internet
Em có ý rồi ạ, nhờ m.n viết thành bài dùm em
advantages:
- social network helps people to connect to each other " change our world into small village"
-helps us to search information in order to widen our knowledge
-useful company in our life to help us on daily work such as entertainmen, trade,...
disadvantages:
-takes too much time and health of users :
+ people spend too much time siting infront of computer bad effect on -> they work and study
+ cause many dangerous diseases such as heart attack , eyesore,...
- according to the sociologists : along with the development of technology, there is a sharp rise in the rating of young criminal
- causes social evil harmful imformation

 

[lehongli]

Internet has become an essential part of modern life. There is no doubt that internet has made our life become easier and more convenient through many advantages it brings to us. Firstly, social network enables people to connect to each other and changes our world into a small village. Secondy, we can use the Internet to search information to widen our knowledge and trade things with people around the globe. It also provides us entertainment, helps us with daily problems. Although the Internet brings us countless advantages, it also has many disadvantages. People may become additcted to social networks and spend too much time on sitting in front of computers, which can have bad effects on your health that may leads to many diseases such as heart-attack, eyesore,... It also decreases your working or studying performance. Sometimes when searching on the Internet, you may receive wrong information or unwanted one. According to the sociologists, along with the development of technology, there is a sharp rise in the rating of young criminal. It is true that the Internet is very useful, but we should be cautious when using it, and try not to be too dependant on it.

 

[tiểu thiên sứ]

Internet has become an essential part of modern life. There is no doubt that internet has made our life become easier and more convenient through many advantages it brings to us. Firstly, social network enables people to connect to each other and changes our world into a small village. Secondy, we can use the Internet to search information to widen our knowledge and trade things with people around the globe. It also provides us entertainment, helps us with daily problems. Although the Internet brings us countless advantages, it also has many disadvantages. People may become additcted to social networks and spend too much time on sitting in front of computers, which can have bad effects on your health that may leads to many diseases such as heart-attack, eyesore,... It also decreases your working or studying performance. Sometimes when searching on the Internet, you may receive wrong information or unwanted one. According to the sociologists, along with the development of technology, there is a sharp rise in the rating of young criminal. It is true that the Internet is very useful, but we should be cautious when using it, and try not to be too dependant on it.

trên đó chỉ là những ý chính thôi ạ, mình làm bài bài luận nên cần phân tích cụ thể thành các ý nhỏ nữa ( bài văn ạ)

 

[tuananh982]

People may become additcted to social networks and spend too much time on sitting in front of computers, which can have bad effects on your health that may leads to many diseases such as heart-attack, eyesore,...

please use "etc."
Your writing is great but I want to show you some mistakes that you should watch out. Some are just misspellings, but some, on the other hand, are about using prepositions.
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Internet has become an essential part of modern life. There is no doubt that internet has made our life become easier and more convenient through many advantages it brings to us. Firstly, social network enables people to connect to each other and changes our world into a small village. Secondy, we can use the Internet to search for information to widen our knowledge and trade things with people around the globe. It also provides us with entertainment, helps us with daily problems. Although the Internet brings us countless advantages, it also has many disadvantages. People may become additcted to social networks and spend too much time on sitting in front of computers, which can have bad effects on your health that may leads to many diseases such as heart-attack, eyesore,... It also decreases your working or studying performance. Sometimes when searching on the Internet, you may receive wrong information or unwanted one. According to the sociologists, along with the development of technology, there is a sharp rise in the rating of young criminal. It is true that the Internet is very useful, but we should be cautious when using it, and try not to be too dependant on it.

 

[lehongli]

please use "etc."
Your writing is great but I want to show you some mistakes that you should watch out. Some are just misspellings, but some, on the other hand, are about using prepositions.
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Internet has become an essential part of modern life. There is no doubt that internet has made our life become easier and more convenient through many advantages it brings to us. Firstly, social network enables people to connect to each other and changes our world into a small village. Secondy, we can use the Internet to search for information to widen our knowledge and trade things with people around the globe. It also provides us with entertainment, helps us with daily problems. Although the Internet brings us countless advantages, it also has many disadvantages. People may become additcted to social networks and spend too much time on sitting in front of computers, which can have bad effeLúccts on your health that may leads to many diseases such as heart-attack, eyesore,... It also decreases your working or studying performance. Sometimes when searching on the Internet, you may receive wrong information or unwanted one. According to the sociologists, along with the development of technology, there is a sharp rise in the rating of young criminal. It is true that the Internet is very useful, but we should be cautious when using it, and try not to be too dependant on it.

Lúc đó 12 giờ thiếu rồi nên mình mắt nhắm mắt mở gõ sai ngữ pháp @@.
Đúng rồi bạn, mình copy vài chỗ y nguyên của bạn chủ thread nên có một lỗi gì đó,
Secondy lạ lạ, secondly mới đúng nè mình gõ thiếu bạn ạ.
Cấu trúc provide somebody with something và provide something to somebody mình có biết, mà lúc đó copy đống entertain rồi daily work mình cắt ghép tùm lum nên lỗi luôn ^^,
Và that MAY LEAD nha, model verb kìa.
Với bài này mình chỉ nối ý lại thôi, chứ không có làm thêm ý nào nên không nhận your writing is great được, cám ơn bạn đã góp ý nha ^^