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“A group of British students would like to go camping in your area. The group leader has asked you to write a report including the following information:
- the best place to camp in your area, and why
- the best time of year for camping there
- what clothes the group members should bring with them”

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Da Lat city is said to be one of the peaceful place to camping because its weather and beauty.In my opinion, the best time to go to camping is in the summer. The sun is gentel, not to harsh. At night, it will be a bit windy so you guys can enjoy the cool weather which you can’t never felt in the big city. ‘Cause Da Lat city is located in the hills so you should bring sport clothes to climbing the hills, zipline swing, explore Tiger cave or trekking to the Langbiang. But don’t forget to bring some beautiful suits and dresses to take some pics at Xuan Huong Lake. In case the weather too cold, you guys should bring some coats and long jeans. In conclusion, going Da Lat city to camping is a great idea in this summer. If you wanna ask more questions about my hometown, don’t forget to contact me.

 

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“A group of British students would like to go camping in your area. The group leader has asked you to write a report including the following information:
- the best place to camp in your area, and why
- the best time of year for camping there
- what clothes the group members should bring with them”

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Da Lat city is said to be one of the peaceful place to camping because its weather and beauty.In my opinion, the best time to go to camping is in the summer. The sun is gentel, not to harsh. At night, it will be a bit windy so you guys can enjoy the cool weather which you can’t never felt in the big city. ‘Cause Da Lat city is located in the hills so you should bring sport clothes to climbing the hills, zipline swing, explore Tiger cave or trekking to the Langbiang. But don’t forget to bring some beautiful suits and dresses to take some pics at Xuan Huong Lake. In case the weather too cold, you guys should bring some coats and long jeans. In conclusion, going Da Lat city to camping is a great idea in this summer. If you wanna ask more questions about my hometown, don’t forget to contact me.

Da Lat city is said to be one of the peaceful place => places ( one of the + số nhiều ) to camping because its => of its weather and beauty.In my opinion, the best time to go to => bỏ camping is in the summer. The sun is gentel => gentle, not to => too harsh. At night, it will be a bit windy so you guys can enjoy the cool weather which you can’t never => ever felt in the big city. ‘Cause Da Lat city is located in the hills so you should bring sport clothes to climbing the hills, zipline swing, explore Tiger cave or trekking to the Langbiang. But don’t forget to bring some beautiful suits and dresses to take some pics at Xuan Huong Lake. In case the weather too cold, you guys should bring some coats and long jeans. In conclusion, going Da => to Da Lat city to=> bỏ ( go to picnic ,còn go camping không có to ạ ) camping is a great idea in => bỏ this summer. If you wanna ask more questions about my hometown, don’t forget to contact me.I hope you have a good time camping.
Anh/chị tham khảo ạ !!
có sai sót mong giúp đỡ.

 

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“A group of British students would like to go camping in your area. The group leader has asked you to write a report including the following information:
- the best place to camp in your area, and why
- the best time of year for camping there
- what clothes the group members should bring with them”

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Da Lat city is said to be one of the peaceful place to camping because its weather and beauty.In my opinion, the best time to go to camping is in the summer. The sun is gentel, not to harsh. At night, it will be a bit windy so you guys can enjoy the cool weather which you can’t never felt in the big city. ‘Cause Da Lat city is located in the hills so you should bring sport clothes to climbing the hills, zipline swing, explore Tiger cave or trekking to the Langbiang. But don’t forget to bring some beautiful suits and dresses to take some pics at Xuan Huong Lake. In case the weather too cold, you guys should bring some coats and long jeans. In conclusion, going Da Lat city to camping is a great idea in this summer. If you wanna ask more questions about my hometown, don’t forget to contact me.

Da Lat city is said to be one of the peaceful place => places ( one of the + số nhiều ) to camping because its => of its weather and beauty.In my opinion, the best time to go to => bỏ camping is in the summer. The sun is gentel => gentle, not to => too harsh. At night, it will be a bit windy so you guys can enjoy the cool weather which you can’t never => ever felt in the big city. ‘Cause Da Lat city is located in the hills so you should bring sport clothes to climbing the hills, zipline swing, explore Tiger cave or trekking to the Langbiang. But don’t forget to bring some beautiful suits and dresses to take some pics at Xuan Huong Lake. In case the weather too cold, you guys should bring some coats and long jeans. In conclusion, going Da => to Da Lat city to=> bỏ ( go to picnic ,còn go camping không có to ạ ) camping is a great idea in => bỏ this summer. If you wanna ask more questions about my hometown, don’t forget to contact me.I hope you have a good time camping.
Anh/chị tham khảo ạ !!
có sai sót mong giúp đỡ.

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Da Lat city is said to be one of the peaceful place ==> places ( one of the + số nhiều ) to camping because its ==> of its weather and beauty. In my opinion, the best time to go to => bỏ camping is in the summer. The sun is gentel ==> gentle, not to ==> too harsh. At night, it will be a bit windy so you guys can enjoy the cool weather which you can’t never felt in the big city ==> idea không hợp lí lắm ==> When the sun sets, there will be a bit wind so you can feel the cool weather and enjoy the hot food in Dalat Night Market. ‘Cause Da Lat city is located in the hills so you should bring sport clothes to climbing ==> climb the hills, zipline swing, explore Tiger cave or trekking to the Langbiang ==> trek Lang Biang Mountain But don’t forget to bring some beautiful suits and dresses to take some pics at Xuan Huong Lake. In case the weather will be too cold, you guys should bring some coats and long jeans. In conclusion, going Da Lat city to camping ==> camping in Dat Lat city is a great idea in => vẫn giữ this summer. If you wanna ask more questions about my hometown, don’t forget to contact me. I hope you have a good time camping.

 

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This report provides information that you need to know before going camping in my hometown.
Da Lat city is said to be one of the peaceful places to camping because of its weather and beauty. I suggest that you should choose the Tran Hung Dao Park situated right on Lam Vien Square with a planted tree area like a rain forest. It is a nice park with quite a variety of flowers to enjoy. I suppose that all of you will feel satisfied as soon as you get here. You will have some interesting things to do such as: climb the hills, discover things, zipline swing, or explore Tiger cave.
The best time of the year for camping in Da Lat is June as it rarely rains; the sun is gentle, not too harsh. When the sun sets, there will be a bit windy so you can feel the cool weather and enjoy the hot food in Dalat Night Market. Consequently, you won’t suffer severe weather conditions. Nevertheless, there is one problem that it is sometimes cold at night despite summer. I think you should bring along some coats and long jeans just in case.
In short, Tran Hung Dao Park would be a good site in Da Lat for camping and June would be the best month weather-wise. If you want to ask more questions about my hometown, don’t forget to contact me. I hope you have a good time camping.
Best regards,
Chloe