Ngoại ngữ Write a paragraph about Volunteer Work

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+Why do people do volunteer work?
  • Volunteering is a great opportunity for you to find your own strength and develop new skills. Plan for a donation campaign that helps you develop the ability to plan your finances. Train and guide other volunteers to help you develop pedagogical skills.
  • Helping others and making the positive impact on the lives of the less fortunate.
  • Improve your career
  • Volunteering helps to connect people from different backgrounds closer together
  • Volunteering reflects a picture of you and is a real example of your enthusiasm, persistence, and interest.
+Have you ever done volunteer work?
Câu này bạn tự làm được mà phải không?
+What kind of volunteer work did you do?
Practical activities, suitable for students and local needs, such as:
+ Sanitation.
+ Propaganda and dissemination of law.
+ Healthcare, universal education, cultural development ...
+ Care for families of war invalids, fallen heroes, policy families, children and teenagers.
+ Hunger elimination, poverty reduction, the universalization of Informatics and Internet, ...
+ Strengthening, building the Union, Association. v. v ...

+How did you feel after doing it?
  • Experience new things
  • Children learn more about life
  • Older people live in a cheerful atmosphere
  • ......
 

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Many people in the world do volunteer work. Each nation has a lot of people who voluntarily take care of others. Even though who you are and how much your age is……… you all do volunteer work. There are many volunteer works such as visiting old or sick people, teach poor children……… and so on, however, have you ever thought that why do people do volunteer work?
It is sure that there are many reasons for it.
In my opinion, there are five main reasons why people do volunteer work. The first reason, I think that it is humanity. People , who feel lucky and have a good life, share the feelings of the poor, the injured, the disables……….and so on. Thus, they want to share with them difficulties and sadness, give small helps to them which can help them overcome troubles. They want to bring happiness to poor and disabled children as well as boys who no longer have fathers and girls who no longer have mothers. They want to help these children be gone to school and teach them things which they usually learn from their parents. Besides, they take care of old and sick people because they consider them as their relatives and hope to help them pass over loneliness and sickness. They also want to their kids about humanity. They teach them to love and help others. Secondly, people do volunteer work because it is their interest in free time, perhaps.” Instead of listening to music or playing games….. we like to do volunteer works. It is really interesting and we can also help others.” Some people shared. Thirdly, some people do it because it is their work. These people usually work in voluntary organizations. They are paid for it. The fourth reason, people who not only want to help but they also train their ability in activities of society, do volunteer work. They think it can both help others and train themselves. They also find out friends or people who have sympathy with them. Finally, above all things, people do volunteer work because they think that the happiest people in the world are those who help to bring happiness to others. It is one of the most successes in their life.
In a word, volunteer work is a happiness, right?!
 

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Many people in the world do volunteer work.
Bỏ work
Each nation has a lot of people who voluntarily take care of others.
Câu này văn phong có vấn đề :3 Tốt nhất bạn đừng dịch từ Tiếng Anh sang tiếng việt!
Even though who you are and how much your age is……… you all do volunteer work. There are many volunteer works such as visiting old or sick people, teach poor children……… and so on, however, have you ever thought that why do people do volunteer work?
teaching ...
Mở bài quá dài dòng mà vẫn chưa rõ ràng đc chủ đề ...
K nên đưa cụm này vào, vì nó hết sức thiếu khách quan
In my opinion, there are five main reasons why people do volunteer work. The first reason, I think that it is humanity. People , who feel lucky and have a good life, share the feelings of the poor, the injured, the disables……….and so on. Thus, they want to share with them difficulties and sadness, give small helps to them which can help them overcome troubles. They want to bring happiness to poor and disabled children as well as boys who no longer have fathers and girls who no longer have mothers. They want to help these children be gone to school and teach them things which they usually learn from their parents. Besides, they take care of old and sick people because they consider them as their relatives and hope to help them pass over loneliness and sickness. They also want to their kids about humanity. They teach them to love and help others. Secondly, people do volunteer work because it is their interest in free time, perhaps.” Instead of listening to music or playing games….. we like to do volunteer works. It is really interesting and we can also help others.” Some people shared. Thirdly, some people do it because it is their work. These people usually work in voluntary organizations. They are paid for it. The fourth reason, people who not only want to help but they also train their ability in activities of society, do volunteer work. They think it can both help others and train themselves. They also find out friends or people who have sympathy with them. Finally, above all things, people do volunteer work because they think that the happiest people in the world are those who help to bring happiness to others. It is one of the most successes in their life.
Đọc chưa hết nhưng có vẻ bạn chưa làm rõ đc yêu cầu của bài :3 Nó quá dài dòng, quá lê thê, luận điểm thiếu tính rõ ràng, cũng hơi thiếu liên kết ...
In a word, volunteer work is a happiness, right?!
Nói thẳng nhé, đi thi HSG mà kết bài ntn thì chỉ ăn điểm 0 phần writing!

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Bỏ work

Câu này văn phong có vấn đề :3 Tốt nhất bạn đừng dịch từ Tiếng Anh sang tiếng việt!

teaching ...
Mở bài quá dài dòng mà vẫn chưa rõ ràng đc chủ đề ...

K nên đưa cụm này vào, vì nó hết sức thiếu khách quan

Đọc chưa hết nhưng có vẻ bạn chưa làm rõ đc yêu cầu của bài :3 Nó quá dài dòng, quá lê thê, luận điểm thiếu tính rõ ràng, cũng hơi thiếu liên kết ...

Nói thẳng nhé, đi thi HSG mà kết bài ntn thì chỉ ăn điểm 0 phần writing!

Copy thì có tâm xíu bạn ạ :)
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Thus, they want to share with them difficulties and sadness, give small helps to them which can help them overcome troubles
Thus, they want to share with them difficulties and sadness, give small help to them which can help them overcome troubles
They want to help these children be gone to school and teach them things which they usually learn from their parents
They also want their kids about humanity. They teach them to love and help others.
They also find out friends or people who have sympathy with them
They also find out friends or people who have sympathy for them
 

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