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[baby_12]

[TẶNG BẠN] TRỌN BỘ Bí kíp học tốt 08 môn
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Write a letter to a friend . tell him / her about a place you have visited recently . Use the following prompts to help you.
Place: Cuc Phuong National Park(Phong Nha Cave/ Ha Long Bay , etc)
distance from your city /home :100km/300km/12hours by train /by coach, etc
How to get there : by bus/ train /airplane, etc
Sights: beautiful /magnificent/breathtaking , etc
Weather : temperate / sunny/ cool/windy, etc
How you feel : happy /escited/ relaxed
THANK YOU VERY MUCH

 

[wolf95]

> bài này là mình thăm nhật bản < có gì các bn sửa dùm và tớ thấy bài tơ nhạt quá! chẳng có cảm xúc gì làm thế nào cho nó hay nhỉ?
Dear .....,
Well, Iam in Tokyo in JapanW e got to Shikoku island . We had a good trip. We visited Matsuyami castle. It is very old but beautiful. Next, we visited Shirado waterfall where is beautiful and fresh. Three day ago, we arrived Fuji Moutain. We saw lost of the cherry blossoms, so we took photos of them and enjoyed the Golinka festival with Japanese people in Fujinomiya Village. It was very fun and people is friendly. Yesterday, we went to Tokyo and visited Hikone museum. It is situated east on the shore ò Biwa River in the middle of Tokyo and Kyoto City. It is really amazing. Luckyly, the weather has been very nice, cloudy and cool. Iwill send you my postcard in here. I think you will like them. See you soon.
Love
Yen

 

[o0honeybaby0o]

> bài này là mình thăm nhật bản < có gì các bn sửa dùm và tớ thấy bài tơ nhạt quá! chẳng có cảm xúc gì làm thế nào cho nó hay nhỉ?
Dear .....,
Well, I am in Tokyo in Japan. We got to Shikoku island . We had a good trip. We visited Matsuyami castle. It is very old but beautiful. Next, we visited Shirado waterfall where is beautiful and fresh. Three day ago, we arrived Fuji Moutain. We saw lost of the cherry blossoms, so we took photos of them and enjoyed the Golinka festival with Japanese people in Fujinomiya Village. It was very fun and people is friendly. Yesterday, we went to Tokyo and visited Hikone museum. It is situated east on the shore of Biwa River in the middle of Tokyo and Kyoto City. It is really amazing. Luckyly, the weather has been very nice, cloudy and cool. I will send you my postcard in here. I think you will like them. See you soon.
Love
Yen

Câu đầu tiên nó hơi lủng củng, mình để nghị bạn sửa lại thế này " I am in Tokyo- the capital city of Japan".
Những câu sau bạn nên gộp lại chứ đừng để câu nào cũng ngắn ngủn như vậy, nó giống như một bài nói hơn, đọc hơi chán . VD: câu 2 và 3 có thể gộp lại là: " we got to Shikoku island where we had a good trip".
Chú ý: "lots of" not "lost of"! hehe...
Àh, "lots of" rồi thì bỏ mạo từ "the" đi.
Câu tiếp theo, "people" mà "is" àh bạn , mà thì quá khứ nữa nhé!
Câu " It situated..." thì tớ không chắc lắm nên không chữa cho cậu được, nhưng thôi, cứ tạm vậy đi .

 

[hoangtu_faithful]

Bài này bạn làm còn khô khan quá chưa có cảm xúc gì cả àh !!!

Mình có sửa lại đôi chỗ nà còn thiếu xót thì chỉ lại mình nha !!!
Dear .....,
I 'm very happy to share with you my journey. I came to Tokio and received very
and very much friendliness of Japanese. This is a interesting ship. The first, we went
to Shikoku island. We made the most of the sence here and felt delight. We visited
Matsuyami castle. It is very great and superb. Next, we visited Shirado waterfall
where the air is fresh and healthy. Three day after, we arrived Fuji Moutain. We
were astonished in the face of sight here. Wow ! There were a lot of the cherry
blossoms so we took many and many photos and enjoyed the Golinka festival with
Japanese in Fujinomiya Village. It was very fun and people is very friendly.
Yesterday, we went to visit Hikone museum. It is located the east of Biwa River in
the middle of Tokyo and Kyoto City. It is really amazing. Fortunately, the weather
was very nice, had cloudy and a bit cool. We finished the ship after the comfortable
week. I will send to you these postcards. I think you like them. Rewrite for me about
your life. I hope to meet you soon !
Love
Yen
Mình mất cả buổi trưa để sửa lại nó đó bạn xem đi Góp ý lại cho mình nha !!!