[ tiếng anh 6 ] Môi trường ở Việt Nam

[tanpopo_98]

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Hi . I'm Linh. I'm from Viet Nam. I'm Vietnamese. My country is very beautiful. We have a lot of mountains, the highest mountain in Viet Nam is Phanxipang. It is 3143 meters high.
We have great rivers like the Red and Mekong Rivers.
We have lots of lake, too.
We have a lot of forests. They are very green, because, my country has lots of rain.
We have lots of beautiful beaches.
But, Viet Nam's environment are in danger.
Why?
Because, the population is growing.
More people need more land.
So, famers are cutting down the forests.
Not only famers but also all man in the world are destroying living environment of wild animals.
More people need more food and we are wasting to much food. Then, food are trash.
We are wasting to much water. The water are the rare thing.
We are polluting environment : air, land, rivers, oceans,...
We are burning to much power : coal, oil and gas.
If we cotinue to ruin environment, the wild animals will extinct.
What are we doing to our environment ? We are ruinning environment.
The environment is our mom. Why don't we help our mom? They are to ask for help. We must help them.
+ Keep off the grass.
+ Save water.
+ Collect paper, bottles and can.
+ Grow trees.
+ Don't throw trash in all place.
+ Don't pick flowers.
+ Don't damage tress.
+ Put trash in a trash can.
To protect the environment, please!

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[tanpopo_98]

mọi người ơi!
cho em biết là em có bị sai chỗ nào không ạ!
cho em ý kiến với!

 

[kothechiuduoc]

Hi . I'm Linh. I'm from Viet Nam. I'm Vietnamese. My country is very beautiful. We have a lot of mountains, the highest mountain in Viet Nam is Phanxipang. It is 3143 meters high.
We have great rivers like the Red and Mekong Rivers.
We have lots of lake, too.
We have a lot of forests. They are very green, because, my country has lots of rain.
We have lots of beautiful beaches.
But, Viet Nam's environment are in danger.
Why?
Because, the population is growing.
More people need more land.
So, famers are cutting down the forests.
Not only famers but also all man in the world are destroying living environment of wild animals.
More people need more food and we are wasting to much food. Then, food are trash.
We are wasting to much water. The water are the rare thing.
We are polluting environment : air, land, rivers, oceans,...
We are burning to much power : coal, oil and gas.
If we cotinue to ruin environment, the wild animals will extinct.
What are we doing to our environment ? We are ruinning environment.
The environment is our mom. Why don't we help our mom? They are to ask for help. We must help them.
+ Keep off the grass.
+ Save water.
+ Collect paper, bottles and can.
+ Grow trees.
+ Don't throw trash in all place.
+ Don't pick flowers.
+ Don't damage tress.
+ Put trash in a trash can.
To protect the environment, please!
chị chỉ biết vậy thôi, em xem lại mấy chỗ chị bôi đen nhé
sau because, but ko cần phải dùng dấu phẩy
có chỗ em chưa thêm "s", cấu trúc lặp nhiều
bài em viết tốt sử dụng nhiều từ vựng đấy
đưa cho cô giáo em sửa cho nha

 

[shadkozi]

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Hi . I'm Linh. I'm from Viet Nam. I'm Vietnamese. My country is very beautiful. We have a lot of mountains, the highest mountain in Viet Nam is Phanxipang. It is 3143 meters high.
We have great rivers like the Red and Mekong Rivers.
We havelots of lakes, too.
We have a lot of forests. They are very green, because, my country haslots of rain.
We have lots of beautiful beaches.
But, Viet Nam's environment are in danger.
Why?
Because, the population is growing.
More people need more lands.
So,(nên thay bằng and) famers are cutting down the forests.
Not only famers but also all man (dùng people, chả nhẽ women không phá huỷ môi trường ah ) ) in the world are destroying living environment of wild animals.
More people need more foods and we are wasting to much food. Then, food are trash.
We are wasting too much water. The water are the rare thing.
We are polluting environment : air, land, rivers, oceans,...
We are burning too much power : coal, oil and gas.
If we continue to ruin the environment, the wild animals will be extinct.
What are we doing to our environment ? We are ruinning the environment.
The environment is our mom. Why don't we help our mom? They are to asking for help. We must help them by:
+ Keeping off the grass.
+ Saving water.
+ Collecting paper, bottles and can.
+ Growing more trees.
+ Don't throw trash in all place.( Nên thay bằng everywhere)
+ Don't pick up flowers.
+ Don't damage tress. ( ý em là tree ah) )
+ Putting trash in a trash can.
To protect the environment, please!

Lưu ý nè
Mực xanh nc biển là lỗi lặp từ em nhé
Mực nâu là dùng từ sai hoặc chưa chuẩn
Mực xanh lá là anh thêm vào nhé
Nói chung bài của em bố cục đc, nhưng diễn đạt chưa được tốt. Tôi đến từ Việt Nam thì đương nhiên tôi là người Việt rồi ) .
Thay vì nói a lot of, lots of, em có thể dùng many.
many trées....
extinct là tính từ nên trước đó phải là động từ tobe nhá
Anh góp ý vậy thôi chứ hồi anh = tuổi em anh ko viết được tốt như này đâu )
Chúc em làm các bài sau tốt hơn nhá >-

 

[tanpopo_98]

thanks mọi người đã chỉ giùm em chỗ sai!
chắc chắn em sẽ cố làm bài tốt hơn!

 

[olympuslord]

Hi . I'm Linh. I'm from Viet Nam. I'm a Vietnamese. My country is very beautiful. We have a lot of mountains, the highest mountain in Viet Nam is Phanxipang. It is 3143 meters high.
We have some great rivers like ( thay bằng such as coi dc không nhé! ) the Red and Mekong Rivers.


vs lại trên kia bạn viết là My country thì câu sau nên thay We bằng It thì hay hơn

 

[symptom]

Viết đoạn văn thì em nên có dàn bài trước. Vdu như
MB Tôi đến từ VN, 1 đất nc có thiên nhiên tươi đẹp nhưng đang bị ô nhiễm
TB nêu 2 ý ở MB
Thiên nhiên tươi đẹp ntn
Đang bị làm cho ô nhiễm ntn
2 cái này nên có liên quan với nhau ( như rừng đẹp thế nào thì phía sau nói nó bị ô nhiễm thế nào )
KB Những hành động để bảo vệ...

Vdu phần MB
Hi . I'm Linh. I'm from Viet Nam, a very beautiful country with many mountains, lakes... and many rare species of animal and tree. However its beauty is now being destroyed.