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Câu chuyện mình viết về chủ đề: the broken window và viết ở thì quá khứ . Các cậu xem giúp mình coi mình có lỗi gì không nha.
Yesterday, as usual, many boys and girls were playing football, badminton in a large yard. A few minutes later, the yard were full of laughter. Unfortunately, the boys kicked the ball too hard that the ball was gone straight ahead and hit a window near there. The window was broken. That window seem very expensive. All of them frozen because of the unexpected situation. After the accident, you couldn't hear a noise, it was very quiet. Because of the big noise, the house owner went out of the house to know what happened to his house. When the boys saw the angry face of the house's onwer, they really scared. They ran away as fast as they could, so the house owner didn't know their face. The girls knew that they would be interrogate, so they ran too. The one thing you could hear was the house owner's shout. Three hours later, both of boys and girls were standing in front of that house. Maybe they all felt guilty. The house owner saw many boys and girls were standing in front of his house, so he went out to know what are they doing. After the boys and girls told him about the story. He tried his best not to be angry cause he knew that they didn't want this accident happended. Then all of them said sorry to the house owner. That is the end of the story.
 
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Câu chuyện mình viết về chủ đề: the broken window và viết ở thì quá khứ . Các cậu xem giúp mình coi mình có lỗi gì không nha.
Yesterday, as usual, many boys and girls were playing football, badminton in a large yard. A few minutes later, the yard were full of laughter. Unfortunately, the boys kicked the ball too hard that the ball was gone straight ahead and hit a window near there. The window was broken. That window seem very expensive. All of them frozen because of the unexpected situation. After the accident, you couldn't hear a noise, it was very quiet. Because of the big noise, the house owner went out of the house to know what happened to his house. When the boys saw the angry face of the house's onwer, they really scared. They ran away as fast as they could, so the house owner didn't know their face. The girls knew that they would be interrogate, so they ran too. The one thing you could hear was the house owner's shout. Three hours later, both of boys and girls were standing in front of that house. Maybe they all felt guilty. The house owner saw many boys and girls were standing in front of his house, so he went out to know what are they doing. After the boys and girls told him about the story. He tried his best not to be angry cause he knew that they didn't want this accident happended. Then all of them said sorry to the house owner. That is the end of the story.
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Câu chuyện mình viết về chủ đề: the broken window và viết ở thì quá khứ . Các cậu xem giúp mình coi mình có lỗi gì không nha.
Yesterday, as usual, many boys and girls were playing football, badminton in a large yard. A few minutes later, the yard were full of laughter. Unfortunately, the boys kicked the ball too hard that the ball was gone straight ahead and hit a window near there. The window was broken. That window seem very expensive. All of them frozen because of the unexpected situation. After the accident, you couldn't hear a noise, it was very quiet. Because of the big noise, the house owner went out of the house to know what happened to his house. When the boys saw the angry face of the house's onwer, they really scared. They ran away as fast as they could, so the house owner didn't know their face. The girls knew that they would be interrogate, so they ran too. The one thing you could hear was the house owner's shout. Three hours later, both of boys and girls were standing in front of that house. Maybe they all felt guilty. The house owner saw many boys and girls were standing in front of his house, so he went out to know what are they doing. After the boys and girls told him about the story. He tried his best not to be angry cause he knew that they didn't want this accident happended. Then all of them said sorry to the house owner. That is the end of the story.
1 số lỗi ngữ pháp, lỗi chính tả bạn gặp phải
were -> was
too hard -> so hard
was gone -> went
seem -> seems
onwer -> owner
be interrogate -> be interrogated
both of boys -> both boys
happended -> happened
 
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