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Quang Ninh
27th, Mar, 2011

Dear Stephanie,
I’m sorry for not writting to you for a long time. May you have an enjoyable Mother’s day.
Last month, I had an interesting trip to Halong with my family. On Sunday, we got up early so as to get there. It was a sunny and beautiful morning, so we were very happy. At 8.00 am, we arrived Halong. First, we hired a boat then we traveled around the bay. It was the first time I have been to the sea. The sun was shinning and the sky was blue there. Especially, the water was so pure that I saw colorful fish swimming around our boat. After that, we visited many famous caves and limestone islands, such as: Dau Go cave, Sung Sot cave, Bai Tho mount,.. They were so magnificent that I couldn’t stop looking them. At 11.30 am, we ate lunch at a restaurant called “Hoang Gia”. It only severs sea food, so we ate many sea food, such as: fish, crab, shrimp, jellyfish,..It tastes quite delicious. In the afternoon, we went to the beach. That beach is a crowded place. Some people flew their kites, some sunbathed, some read books,..My parents like swimming, so they swam but I didn’t. I prefer to collect snail shells in the sand beach. When I was collecting, I met some foreign tourists. Luckily, they spoke quite slowly and I could understand all things. I also took some photos with them. At 5.00 pm, my mother and I went to a market. We bought some souvenirs for our relatives and friends (and also for you ^^). Finally, we went home at 6.00 pm.
It’s such a wonderful trip. I like the beach best because it was very beautiful.
What do you think about my trip? Write to me soon and tell me your feeling.
Love,
Mai
 
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diema3

Quang Ninh
27th, Mar, 2011

Dear Stephanie,
I’m sorry for not writting=> that I haven't written( chị thấy khi viết thư thì người a không hay viết thế dùng mệnh đè nhiều hơn ) to you for a long time. May=> Perhaps you have an enjoyable Mother’s day.
Last month, I had an interesting trip to Halong with my family. On Sunday, we got up early so as to get there. It was a sunny and beautiful morning, so we were very happy. At 8.00 am, we arrived in( địa điểm lớn ) Halong. First, we hired a boat then we traveled around the bay. It was the first time I have been to the sea. The sun was shinning and the sky was blue there. Especially, the water was so pure that I saw colorful fish swimming around our boat. After that, we visited many famous caves and limestone islands, such as: Dau Go cave, Sung Sot cave, Bai Tho mount,.. They were so magnificent that I couldn’t stop looking them. At 11.30 am, we ate => had lunch at a restaurant called “Hoang Gia”. It only severs sea food, so we ate many sea food, such as: fish, crab, shrimp, jellyfish,..It tastes quite delicious. In the afternoon, we went to the beach. That beach is a crowded place. Some people flew their kites, some sunbathed, some read books,..My parents like swimming, so they swam but I didn’t. I prefer to collect snail shells in the sand => sandy beach. When I was collecting, I met some foreign tourists. Luckily, they spoke quite slowly and I could understand all things. I also took some photos with => photographs of them. At 5.00 pm, my mother and I went to a => the market. We bought some souvenirs for our relatives and friends (and also for you ^^). Finally, we went home at 6.00 pm.
It’s such a wonderful trip. I like the beach best because it was=> is ( sự thật ) very beautiful.
What do you think about my trip? Write to me soon and tell me your feeling.
Love,
Mai
 
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starfish_blue_sea

@ chị Diễm ơi, em thấy mấy chỗ không hiểu lắm, chị xét lại giùm em nha ^^
At 5.00 pm, my mother and I went to a => the market

Cái chợ không hề được nhắc đến trong tất cả các câu trước. Nó chưa hề được xác định. Taij sao lại dùng "the" thay vì "a" ạ?
I like the beach best because it was=> is ( sự thật ) very beautiful.

Vài lần cô giáo chữa cho em, chỗ này vẫn có thể để "was" được (dù nó là sự thật). Có đúng nhứ thế không chị?

May=> Perhaps you have an enjoyable Mother’s day

Em không biết nhiều về cái này. Chị có thể giải thích rõ được không? ^^

I prefer to collect snail shells in the sand => sandy beach

Cái này trong sgk em thấy vẫn để là sand beach chị ạ :D
 
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minhnam138

Quang Ninh
27th, Mar, 2011

Dear Stephanie,
I’m sorry for not writting=> that I haven't written( chị thấy khi viết thư thì người a không hay viết thế dùng mệnh đè nhiều hơn ) to you for a long time. May=> Perhaps you have an enjoyable Mother’s day.
Last month, I had an interesting trip to Halong with my family. On Sunday, we got up early so as to get there. It was a sunny and beautiful morning, so we were very happy. At 8.00 am, we arrived in( địa điểm lớn ) Halong. First, we hired a boat then we traveled around the bay. It was the first time I have been to the sea. The sun was shinning and the sky was blue there. Especially, the water was so pure that I saw colorful fish swimming around our boat. After that, we visited many famous caves and limestone islands, such as: Dau Go cave, Sung Sot cave, Bai Tho mount,.. They were so magnificent that I couldn’t keep my eyes off them. At 11.30 am, we ate => had lunch at a restaurant called “Hoang Gia”. It only served sea food, so we ate many sea food, such as: fish, crab, shrimp, jellyfish,..It tasted quite delicious. In the afternoon, we went to the beach. That beach is a crowded place. Some people flew their kites, some sunbathed, some read books,..My parents like swimming, so they swam but I didn’t. I prefer to collect snail shells in the sand => sandy beach. When I was collecting, I met some foreign tourists. Luckily, they spoke quite slowly and I could understand all things. I also took some photos with => photographs of them. At 5.00 pm, my mother and I went to a => the market. We bought some souvenirs for our relatives and friends (and also for you ^^). Finally, we went home at 6.00 pm.
It’s such a wonderful trip. I like the beach best because it was=> is ( sự thật ) very beautiful.
What do you think about my trip? Write to me soon and tell me your feeling.
Love,
Mai

Mình nghĩ bạn đang có 1 số nhầm lẫn về việc sử dụng thì hiện tại và quá khứ. Thì hiện tại dùng để chỉ những việc hiển nhiên xảy ra, đúng. Nhưng những thứ hiển nhiên xảy ra chỉ có thể là Thiên nhiên, lịch hoạt động(hiện tại tiêp diễn), ... chứ những thứ như nhà hàng phục vụ đồ biển hay ko bạn đều nên để ở quá khứ :D
 
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