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Getting round to establishing and working as a part of your own business can be a bright way to give you an opportunity to get closer to your success. In other words, there are lots of positive aspects that should be paid attention to. However, this can also be a very big barrier as the lack of experience and knowledge, which should be previously prepared when you were still working for a company or organisation.

The beginning of a career can be regarded as one of the most important periods of a person's life. It also means that this will bring us many disadvantages as well as negative impacts. Firstly, it is noted for the shortage of acknowledgement and personal experience when you are not a professional at starting up a business. Most people usually have to deal with these problems, and maybe there are not any relevant solutions suitable for these difficulties. As a result, the start-up bosses have to suffer from high pressure and high responsibility. Both their mental and physical health are exhausted, which will affect your lifestyle in a negatively dramatic way. Keeping up with the problem is an enormous challenge for the company’s finances. When you start up, you can receive a lot of support from your relatives, friends, and a great range of different companies who have great confidence in your business’s success. However, if we get the risks, a big debt can lead you to bankruptcy. In other words, a huge damage to your property and you come back to number zero.

In contrast, the decision to start a new business could be a bright choice. The success from controlling your business could give you the exact direction to fame and a higher social standard. Socialization and communication are improved as your wide relationships with everyone. Therefore, you can receive enthusiastic support whenever you are in an emergency situation. All the new, sweet fruits of success are waiting for you to harvest, but not in an ordinary way. You have to get foresight, experience, and, of course, your knowledge.

In conclusion, the drawbacks of starting a new business should be paid more attention to. As you can see, working for a company or organization before starting your own business would be very necessary because you can learn many useful lessons rather than getting rid of them before starting your own career.

Các bạn giúp mình sửa những lỗi tồn tại trong bài trên với ạ, mình cảm ơn nhiều!

 

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Getting round to establishing and working as a part of your own business can be a bright way to give you an opportunity to get closer to your success. In other words, there are lots of positive aspects that should be paid attention to. However, this can also be a very big barrier as the lack of experience and knowledge, which should be previously prepared when you were still working for a company or organisation.

The beginning of a career can be regarded as one of the most important periods of a person's life. It also means that this will bring us many disadvantages as well as negative impacts. Firstly, it is noted for the shortage of acknowledgement and personal experience when you are not a professional at starting up a business. Most people usually have to deal with these problems, and maybe there are not any relevant solutions suitable for these difficulties. As a result, the start-up bosses have to suffer from high pressure and high responsibility. Both their mental and physical health are exhausted, which will affect your lifestyle in a negatively dramatic way. Keeping up with the problem is an enormous challenge for the company’s finances. When you start up, you can receive a lot of support from your relatives, friends, and a great range of different companies who have great confidence in your business’s success. However, if we get the risks, a big debt can lead you to bankruptcy. In other words, a huge damage to your property and you come back to number zero.

In contrast, the decision to start a new business could be a bright choice. The success from controlling your business could give you the exact direction to fame and a higher social standard. Socialization and communication are improved as your wide relationships with everyone. Therefore, you can receive enthusiastic support whenever you are in an emergency situation. All the new, sweet fruits of success are waiting for you to harvest, but not in an ordinary way. You have to get foresight, experience, and, of course, your knowledge.

In conclusion, the drawbacks of starting a new business should be paid more attention to. As you can see, working for a company or organization before starting your own business would be very necessary because you can learn many useful lessons rather than getting rid of them before starting your own career.

Các bạn giúp mình sửa những lỗi tồn tại trong bài trên với ạ, mình cảm ơn nhiều!

Getting round to establishing and working as a part of your own business can be a bright way to give you an opportunity to get closer to your success. In other words, there are lots of positive aspects that should be paid attention to. However, this can also be a very big barrier as the lack of experience and knowledge, which should be previously prepared when you were still working for a company or organisation. (lặp từ,câu bị rối,đổi to get thành getting hoặc thay cụm 'give you an opportunity' thành 'allow',hoặc cả hai)

The beginning of a career can be regarded as one of the most important periods of a person's life. It also means that this will bring us many disadvantages as well as negative impacts. Firstly, it is noted for the shortage of acknowledgement and personal experience when you are not a professional at starting up a business. Most people usually have to deal with these problems, and maybe there are not any relevant solutions suitable for these difficulties. As a result, the start-up bosses have to suffer from high pressure and high responsibility. Both their mental and physical health are exhausted, which will affect your lifestyle in a negatively dramatic way. Keeping up with the problem is an enormous challenge for the company’s finances. When you startup, you can receive a lot of support from your relatives, friends, and a great range of different companies who have great confidence in your business’s success. However, if we get the risks, a big debt can lead you to bankruptcy. In other words, a huge (bỏ a) damage to your property and you come back to number zero. we-you (không đồng bộ,1 là we-us,2 là you-you).

In contrast, the decision to start a new business could be a bright choice. The success of controlling your business could give you the exact direction to fame and a higher social standard. Socialization and communication are improved as your wide relationships with everyone. Therefore, you can receive enthusiastic support whenever you are in an emergency situation. All the new, sweet fruits of success are waiting for you to harvest, but not in an ordinary way. You have to get foresight, experience, and, of course, your knowledge.

In conclusion, the drawbacks of starting a new business should be paid more attention to. As you can see, working for a company or organization before starting your own business would be very necessary because you can learn many useful lessons rather than getting rid of them before starting your own career. (cái in đậm không được hợp lý lắm, getting rid of cái disadvantage ,câu này dịch là có thể học nhiều bài học từ việc làm cho các tổ chức trước khi tự tạo công ty của riêng mình hơn là bỏ cái bất lợi. Nghe không hợp lý. Mình nghĩ that rather than thành and,câu sẽ là học được bài học và tự biết cách loại bỏ các bất lợi trước khi tuwh tạo cty của mình)