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[helldemon]

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Em rất tệ phần viết nên viết thử rùi post lên đây nhờ anh chị sửa giùm !
Chắc sai nhiều lắm !

Last year, I spended my summer holidays on a seaside town. The hotel is modern and comfortable. I had wonderful holiday until fire.
It was Saturday evening and everybody was the discotheque on ground floor. It was crowed with people. They danced and sang happily. Suddenly, we smelt smoke. Then black smoke began fill the room. Everybody started scream in panic. People ran toward to fire exits. One door was block. Many people began cough choke.
Then just as we though we had only minutes to live, fire brigade arrived. Firemen fought their way into room and soonly, everyone was safely out of the building. Luckily, nobody was seriously hurt. It was a most frightening experience of my life.

 

[hihihaha111]

Em rất tệ phần viết nên viết thử rùi post lên đây nhờ anh chị sửa giùm !
Chắc sai nhiều lắm !

Last year, I spended my summer holidays on a seaside town. The hotel is modern and comfortable. I had wonderful holiday until fire.
It was Saturday evening and everybody was the discotheque on ground floor. It was crowed with people. They danced and sang happily. Suddenly, we smelt smoke. Then black smoke began fill the room. Everybody started scream in panic. People ran toward to fire exits. One door was block. Many people began cough choke.
Then just as we though we had only minutes to live, fire brigade arrived. Firemen fought their way into room and soonly, everyone was safely out of the building. Luckily, nobody was seriously hurt. It was a most frightening experience of my life.

spend\Rightarrow spent. bạn xem lại nhé
is\Rightarrowwas
soonly\Rightarrowsoon

 

[freakie_fuckie]

em rất tệ phần viết nên viết thử rùi post lên đây nhờ anh chị sửa giùm ! :d
chắc sai nhiều lắm ! :d

last year, i spended -> spent my summer holidays-> holiday or vacation on a seaside town. The hotel is-> was (past simple) modern and comfortable. I had a wonderful holiday until fire (?).
it was saturday evening and everybody was the discotheque on ground floor. It was crowed with people. They danced and sang happily. Suddenly, we smelt smoke. Then black smoke began fill->to fill or filling the room. Everybody started scream-> screaming in panic. People ran toward to fire exits. One door was blocked . Many people began cough -> coughing choke.
then just as we though we had only minutes to live- ứ hiểu :-?, fire brigade-> firemen or firefighters arrived. firemen fought their way into room and soonly-> fought (?), everyone was safely out of the building. Luckily, nobody was seriously hurt (hurt hình như không để ở passive :-?). it was a most frightening experience of my life- dùng mấy cái most thấy người ta toàn xài present perfect.

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:-* .

 

[helldemon]

Bài này là phần write của sách lớp 10 đó ạ !

I had wonderful holiday until fire.

Cái này dịch nôm na hình như là Tôi đã có một kỳ nghỉ tuyệt vời cho đến khi trận hỏa hoạn xảy ra

Then just as we though we had only minutes to live, fire brigade arrived.

Theo em hiểu thì nó là Đến khi chũng tôi nghĩ rằng chúng tôi chỉ còn vài phút để sống thì đội cứu hỏa tới .

It was a most frightening experience of my life.

Câu này chắc đúng ạ ! Tại em thấy trong sách có câu tương tự !

Mấy câu trên giúp em sửa ngữ pháp được không ạ ! Em cảm ơn !

 

[tomcangxanh]

Nguyên văn bởi helldemon

I had wonderful holiday until fire.

Cái này dịch nôm na hình như là Tôi đã có một kỳ nghỉ tuyệt vời cho đến khi trận hỏa hoạn xảy ra

until the fire

Nguyên văn bởi helldemon
Then just as we though we had only minutes to live, fire brigade arrived.


Theo em hiểu thì nó là Đến khi chũng tôi nghĩ rằng chúng tôi chỉ còn vài phút để sống thì đội cứu hỏa tới .

với ý như thế thì viết thành, when we thought that we had only minutes to live, ....

Nguyên văn bởi helldemon

It was a most frightening experience of my life.


Câu này chắc đúng ạ ! Tại em thấy trong sách có câu tương tự !

Mấy câu trên giúp em sửa ngữ pháp được không ạ ! Em cảm ơn !

The most nhé.

 

[pekhapro]

Em rất tệ phần viết nên viết thử rùi post lên đây nhờ anh chị sửa giùm !
Chắc sai nhiều lắm !

Last year, I spended>spent my summer holiday(s) on a seaside town. The hotel is>was modern and comfortable. I had a wonderful holiday until fire> the fire .
It was (a) Saturday evening and everybody was the discotheque on ground floor. It was crowed with people. They danced and sang > were dancing and singing (chỉ một hành động dài đang diễn ra thì một hành động ngắn xen vào) happily. Suddenly, we smelt smoke. Then black smoke began fill the room. Everybody started scream in panic. People ran toward to fire exits. One door was block>bloked(thể bị động nhé bạn). Many people began to cough and choke.
Then just as we though we had only minutes to live, fire brigade arrived. Firemen fought their way into the room and soonly > soon, everyone was safely out of the building. Luckily, nobody was seriously hurt. It was a most frightening experience of>in my life.

Hình như bài này là bài viết trong tiếng anh lớp 9 đúng ko?
Tại bài viết đơn giản nên mình dùng mấy câu mẫu trong sách là ổn rồi! Sửa như thế chắc cũng được rồi đó nha! hì!

 

[sieudaochich_kid_1412]

ah
Bài viết này là phần task 3 ở unit 1 trong SGK tiếng anh lớp 10 phải ko bạn
Theo tớ thì viết thế này:
Last year,I spent summer holidays in a seaside town . The hotel was modern and comfortable. I had a wonderful holiday until the fire .
It was Saturday evening and everybody was in the discotheque on the ground floor . It was the crowded with people. They danced and sang happily. Suddenly, we smelt smoke . Then black smoke began to fill the room. Everybody started to scream in panic. People ran toward fire exist . One door was blocked. Many people began coughing and choking.
Then, just as we thought we had only minutes to live, the fire of brigade arrived. Firemen fought their way into the room and soon everyone was sàely out of the building. Luckily nobody was seriously hurted. I was most frightening experience of my life.