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hihi, tớ ngu môn Anh, hum nay chả hiểu sao hứng lên vô đay, hihi, mong các bạn bày cho tơ vài chiêu hen
dưới đây là 1 bài viết của Maruco kể về 1 kỉ niệm có thật( hì, ai đọc xong thì đừng có cười tớ nghen) , nhưng mà hum đó lên bảng nộp cho thầy thì thầy bảo sai chính tả tùm lum, hic, các bạn vô sửa giùm maruco cái hen, cho vui thui, mặc dù bài này tớ viết hồi 11, hì:
This is my second terrible experiences. It happen when I was in grade 7 and I also in my summer vacation. That was Sunday. In that time, the television was showing immediate the World Cup. I and my brother, he was in grade 3, very interested in it. We decided to imitate the TV program. We organised a match between me and him in our yard. With an old ball, we played together. We was engrossed in it. But the yard was small, so we didn' t feel comfortable. We pushed mutual and shouted. Unfortunately, my brother pushed me in the spray of cactus when we was competing with each other in the ball. My left hand was stabted by the flax of the cactus and began to swell. I felt very sore and scared. I tryed spiting some of them by myselt. In that lunch, my parent help me to spiting the rest of the flax in my hand and antisepticed. The other next day, I felt better, but I only done all things by the right hand. After half month, my hand was becoming normal and the flax which hide in my hand also tick out. My brother also apologized of hí activity. But now, I never play football again
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miss_kool

This is my second terrible experiences. It happened
in summer vacation.when I was in grade 7 That was Sunday. In that time, the television was showing immediately the World Cup. I and my brother in grade 3 were very interested in it. We decided to imitate the TV program. We organised a match between me and him in our yard. With an old ball, we played together. We was engrossed into it. But the yard was small, so we didn' t feel comfortable. We pushed mutual and shouted. Unfortunately, my brother pushed me in the spray of cactus when we was competing with each other in the ball. My left hand was stabted by the flax of the cactus and began to swell. I felt very sore and scared. I tryed spiting some of them by myselt. In that lunch, my parent helped me to spit the rest of the flax in my hand and antisepticed. In the next day, I felt better, but I only did all things by my right hand. After half month, my hand was becoming normal and the flax which hided my hand also tick out.And My brother apologized for hí activity. Up to now, I never play football again
 
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shadkozi

This is my second terrible experiences. It happened when I was in grade seven( Viết đoạn văn ko dùng số nha :D) and I also in my summer vacation . That was Sunday. At that time, the television was showing immediate the World Cup. I and my brother, who was in grade three, were very interested in it. We decided to imitate the players in this program. We organised a football match between me and him in our yard. With an old ball, we played together ( câu này vụng). We was engrossed(? từ này mang nghĩa j @@) in it. More over the yard was small, so we didn' t feel comfortable. We pushed mutual and shouted( câu này vụng). Unfortunately, my brother pushed me in the spray of cactus when we was competing with each other in the ball. My left hand was hurt and began to swell because of the flax of the cactus . I felt very sore and scared. I tried to spit all of them by myself. In that lunch, my parent helped me to spit the rest of the flax and disinfect my hand. The other next day, I felt better, but I could only do all things by the right hand. After half month, my hand became normal and the flax which hided in my hand is also taken out. My brother also apologized of hí activity. And now, I never play football again.

Hic, công nhận là bài bạn sai nhiều lỗi thật, chủ yếu là ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ. Mình đã chữa rồi đấy
Chữ xanh: Những chỗ mình chữa
Chữ tím: Những chỗ không cần thiết
Dù sao thì phải sai nhiều thì sau này mới giỏi lên đc => Chúc bạn viết tốt hơn ^^
 
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