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thanhvu94

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Do you agree or disagree with this statement ?
PEOPLE WITH SIMILAR PERSONALITIES MAKE THE BEST FRIENDS
Why and why not ? Give the reasons and explanation .


I myself don’t have a lot of friends but all of my best friends always have same personalities, very few of them don’t. Therefore , I absolutely agree with this statement because we can only be best friends if there’re some similarities between each other.

First of all , having some similarities make me feel easy to talk together. We don’t need to think about what to talk everyday, we always have things to discuss about. If we don’t have same personalities , sometimes it’s hard to find the topic to talk or just talk about nonsense things . I think it’s so meaningless and that’s hard to lead to best friends.

As my case , I and my friends both prefer playing badminton and studying Math . Therefore, we often gather at my house for working in group and sometimes we play badminton together . It makes us nearer and happy a lots .

Secondly, same personalities create an understanding between I and my friends . When we funny or sad about something , we can share it with them . They make me feel relieved a lots . Furthermore , when we have become understandable , it’s hard to get angry for a long time .

I remembered there was a time when I’m feel very depressed because I always got bad marks even try hard . When seeing my sad face , they recognized something unsual . They continuously asked me and I told them all my problem . After a while , they decided to help me with my studying. Gradually , my marks improved a lots . It’s because they used to be in the same situation as me , so it’s easy to be sympathetic . That’s the reason why I say that having same personalities create an understanding .

In a word, having friends with the same characteristics is beneficial . They’re the most reliable moral support who pick you up when you fall down in this life .


Có thể có rất nhiều lỗi , mong anh chị cao thủ chặt chém giùm em .
Cảm ơn rất nhiều
 
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shadkozi

Mình ko bikbanj học lớp mấy nhưng thôi xưng mình- cậu vậy
đọc một lèo thì thấy có vài lỗi sau bạn cần sửa:
1/I and my friends -> my friends and I ( câu này mình đã mắc 1 lần rùi vì bên nc ngoài luôn đặt mình sau người khác)
2/It makes us nearer and happy a lots -> It makes us close to each other ( theo mình nên thế này cho rõ ý mà ngắn gọn)
3/ we funny -> we are funny ( sai lỗi ngữ pháp nè)
4/ have become -> became ( ngữ pháp nữa nè)
5/I’m feel very depressed -> I felt ( lại ngữ pháp)
6/unsual-> unusual ( lỗi chính tả nhá)
7/all my problem -> all my problems ( có all rồi phải có số nhiều chứ)
8/help me with my studying ( theo mình nên dùng for thay cho with? )
9/my marks improved
+ nếu giữ nguyên thì thiếu động từ tobe vì đây phải là câu bị động
my marks were improved alots ( cái nỳ ko chắc lắm)
+ theo mình ko nên dùng improved mà thay bằng become better and better ( thế này thiif hợp lí hơn)

thế thôi, tím vậy chắc cũng khá hơn rùi, chúc bạn viết luận tiến bộ hơn
( best wish)
 
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laurent_teresa

Do you agree or disagree with this statement ?
PEOPLE WITH SIMILAR PERSONALITIES MAKE THE BEST FRIENDS
Why and why not ? Give the reasons and explanation .


I myself don’t have a lot of friends but all of my best friends always have same personalities, very few of them don’t. Therefore , I absolutely agree with this statement because we can only be best friends if there’re some similarities between each other.

First of all , having some similarities make me feel easy to talk together. We don’t need to think about what to talk everyday, we always have things to discuss about. If we don’t have same personalities , sometimes it’s hard to find the topic to talk or just talk about nonsense things . I think it’s so meaningless and that’s hard to lead to best friends.

As my case , I and my friends both prefer playing badminton and studying Math . Therefore, we often gather at my house for working in group and sometimes we play badminton together . It makes us nearer and happy a lots .

Secondly, same personalities create an understanding between I and my friends . When we (are) funny or sad about something , we can share it with them . They make me feel relieved a lots . Furthermore , when we have become understandable , it’s hard to get angry for a long time .

I remembered there was a time when I’m feel ( felt) very depressed because I always got bad marks even try hard . When seeing my sad face , they recognized something unusual . They continuously asked me and I told them all my problems . After a while , they decided to help me with my studying. Gradually , my marks improved a lots . It’s because (because là verb) they used to be in the same situation as me , so it’s easy to be sympathetic . That’s the reason why I say that having same personalities create an understanding .

In a word,( chắc phải là world chứ, vì word là từ ngữ mà!) having friends with the same characteristics is beneficial . They’re the most reliable moral support who pick you up when you fall down in this life


Mình sửa sơ sơ.

1. Đây là văn tranh luận, hạn chế viết tắt ( kiểu như I'm hay don't...)
2. Tốt nhất ko nên dùng I myself, mình ko biết đùng hay sai nhưng nghe như dịch từ t.Việt qua í!
3. Each other chỉ dùng cho 2 người thôi, trong trường hợp này nên dùng one another.
4. Dicuss ko đi với giới từ about (hình như lại dịch từ t.Việt sang), cấu trúc là discuss Sth.
5. My frriends and I...

Lần sau cố gắng hơn nhá


Gửi bạn shadkozi: have become là đúng rồi, P.P của become là become là, còn V2 của nó mới là became!
 
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kpham4232

ko nen de i myself
the first sentence: change: always = usually
between each other= between us
the second paragraph and the third paragraph you should to put together.
put the comma before"and"
we can share it with them=we can share with each other.
i always got bad mark even i try hard.= i got bad marks,even i try to stydy hard.
After a while , they decided to help me with my studying. Gradually , my marks improved a lots =After a while , they decided to help me with my studying to make my mark better.
That’s the reason why I say that having same personalities create an understanding =that's why I say that having same personalities create an understanding
plus the correct above
this is my idea sorry if something is wrong
 
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vothien14

Do you agree or disagree with this statement ?
PEOPLE WITH SIMILAR PERSONALITIES MAKE THE BEST FRIENDS
Why and why not ? Give the reasons and explanation .


I myself don’t have a lot of friends but all of my best friends always have same personalities, very few of them don’t. Therefore , I absolutely agree with this statement because we can only be best friends if there’re some similarities between each other.

First of all , having some similarities make me feel easy to talk together. We don’t need to think about what to talk everyday, we always have things to discuss about. If we don’t have same personalities , sometimes it’s hard to find the topic to talk or just talk about nonsense things . I think it’s so meaningless and that’s hard to lead to best friends.

As my case , I and my friends both prefer playing badminton and studying Math . Therefore, we often gather at my house for working in group and sometimes we play badminton together . It makes us nearer and happy a lots .

Secondly, same personalities create an understanding between I and my friends . When we funny or sad about something , we can share it with them . They make me feel relieved a lots . Furthermore , when we have become understandable , it’s hard to get angry for a long time .

I remembered there was a time when I’m feel very depressed because I always got bad marks even try hard . When seeing my sad face , they recognized something unsual . They continuously asked me and I told them all my problem . After a while , they decided to help me with my studying. Gradually , my marks improved a lots . It’s because they used to be in the same situation as me , so it’s easy to be sympathetic . That’s the reason why I say that having same personalities create an understanding .

In a word, having friends with the same characteristics is beneficial . They’re the most reliable moral support who pick you up when you fall down in this life .


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