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Once upon a time, in a village, there was a shepherd man who named Erzi. Father and mother of Erzi died so young and left him lived with his grandmother. Once time, Erzi took a nap while his sheep ate grass in a hill. When Erzi woke up, his sheep were gone. He was very surprised cause it was all his fortune and he began crying. Near that, there was a old man. The Old man came and asked he : “ Why are you crying “. Erzi explained everything for the old man. The old man brought Erzi a bag and said : “ Don’t give it to everyone “. Erzi thanked the old man and he came back to his grandmother house. When he came back, the grandmother started blaming him but in the end, the grandmother forgave it for Erzi. But grandmother said : “ I will forgive all of this for you, Erzi but you should better know that it is all of our fortune. So you need to take this shield. It made by silver and it was our last fortune. Remember take it to market and sell it. There are two way to go to market. One way is long but safety but the others is dangerous but short. You must promise with me that you will go to the first way. “ Erzi promised with his grandmother. The next day, from the early morning, Erzi started going. While he walked, he also watched a beautiful flower and bird who sang in the branch of tree. He countinued going and he didn’t know that he went to dangerous way. He countinued and countinued go. After going very far, he was thristy and wanted drinking. He saw a stream and went to drink in that. After that, he saw a horse who was very thristy. Erzi took some water for horse. The horse thanked him and it would help him if it could. Erzi countinued going and he saw a boat. The boat need Erzi help it. With the gentlement, Erzi fixed it and it promised Erzi. Erzi countinued going and now, he saw a eagle who was injured in . He was very scared and he didn’t want to help it. But with the gentlement, he went near eagle and helped. And eagle also thanked him. Erzi countinued going. But in this time, there were a orge family went to. Erzi wanted to escape but he couldn’t. He was captured to a dark and tall tower. Erzi was in the highest room of this tower. He heard that orge family were going to eat him. Erzi cried and he wanted to escaped. When he was disappointed, the eagle landed in the tower and brought him to escaped the tower. The orge family saw that and they chased to Erzi. They threw stone to attack eagle. Eagle dropped Erzi into the ground. And this time, the horse helped him. The horse ran so fast but the orge family chased very near. The horse went into the river and dropped Erzi into the boat. And this time, orge family couldn’t chase Erzi. The boat drove Erzi to his grandmother house. Erzi came back and hugged his grandmother. He explained anything with his grandmother. He said : “ Sorry grandmother ! I knew I was wrong . I promised I won’t be giddy “. Then his grandmother agreed to forgive for him. After all, Erzi and his grandmother lived all life in their countryside happily.
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Once upon a time, in a village, there was a shepherd man who named Erzi. Father and mother of Erzi died so young and left him lived with his grandmother. Once time, Erzi took a nap while his sheep ate grass in a hill. When Erzi woke up, his sheep were gone. He was very surprised cause it was all his fortune and he began crying. Near that, there was a old man. The Old man came and asked he : “ Why are you crying “. Erzi explained everything for the old man. The old man brought Erzi a bag and said : “ Don’t give it to everyone “. Erzi thanked the old man and he came back to his grandmother house. When he came back, the grandmother started blaming him but in the end, the grandmother forgave it for Erzi. But grandmother said : “ I will forgive all of this for you, Erzi but you should better know that it is all of our fortune. So you need to take this shield. It made by silver and it was our last fortune. Remember take it to market and sell it. There are two way to go to market. One way is long but safety but the others is dangerous but short. You must promise with me that you will go to the first way. “ Erzi promised with his grandmother. The next day, from the early morning, Erzi started going. While he walked, he also watched a beautiful flower and bird who sang in the branch of tree. He countinued going and he didn’t know that he went to dangerous way. He countinued and countinued go. After going very far, he was thristy and wanted drinking. He saw a stream and went to drink in that. After that, he saw a horse who was very thristy. Erzi took some water for horse. The horse thanked him and it would help him if it could. Erzi countinued going and he saw a boat. The boat need Erzi help it. With the gentlement, Erzi fixed it and it promised Erzi. Erzi countinued going and now, he saw a eagle who was injured in . He was very scared and he didn’t want to help it. But with the gentlement, he went near eagle and helped. And eagle also thanked him. Erzi countinued going. But in this time, there were a orge family went to. Erzi wanted to escape but he couldn’t. He was captured to a dark and tall tower. Erzi was in the highest room of this tower. He heard that orge family were going to eat him. Erzi cried and he wanted to escaped. When he was disappointed, the eagle landed in the tower and brought him to escaped the tower. The orge family saw that and they chased to Erzi. They threw stone to attack eagle. Eagle dropped Erzi into the ground. And this time, the horse helped him. The horse ran so fast but the orge family chased very near. The horse went into the river and dropped Erzi into the boat. And this time, orge family couldn’t chase Erzi. The boat drove Erzi to his grandmother house. Erzi came back and hugged his grandmother. He explained anything with his grandmother. He said : “ Sorry grandmother ! I knew I was wrong . I promised I won’t be giddy “. Then his grandmother agreed to forgive for him. After all, Erzi and his grandmother lived all life in their countryside happily.
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Once upon a time, in a village, there was a shepherd man who named Erzi. THE Father and mother of Erzi died so young and left him lived with his grandmother. Once time, Erzi took a nap while his sheep ate grass in ON a hill. When Erzi woke up, his sheep were gone. He was very surprised,(có dấu phẩy hoặc phải là because ) cause it was all his fortune and he began crying. Near that, there was aN old man. The Old man came and asked he : “ Why are you crying “. Erzi explained everything for TO the old man. The old man brought Erzi a bag and said : “ Don’t give it to everyone “. Erzi thanked the old man and he came back to his grandmother house. When he came back, the grandmother started blaming him but in the end, the grandmother forgave it for (bỏ) Erzi. But grandmother said : “ I will forgive all of this for you, Erzi (phẩy) but you should better know that it is all of our fortunes. So you need to take this shield. It is made by (OF) silver and it was our last fortune. Remember take it to market and sell it. There are two wayS to go to market. One way is long but safety but the others is dangerous but short. You must promise with(bỏ) me that you will go to(bỏ) the first way. “ Erzi promised with his grandmother. The next day, from the early morning, Erzi started going. While he walked, he also watched a beautiful flower and bird who sang in the branch of A tree. He continued (continued) going and he didn’t know that he went to dangerous way. He countinued and countinued (Sai chính tả,sửa như trên ) go. After going very far, he was thristy (chính tả, thirsty) and wanted TO DRINK drinking. He saw a stream and went to drink in that. After that, he saw a horse who was very thristy (tương tự). Erzi took some water for THE horse. The horse thanked him and it would help him if it could. Erzi countinued (chính tả) going and he saw a boat. The boat needs Erzi to help it. With the gentlement, Erzi fixed it and it promised Erzi. Erzi countinued (chính tả)going and now, he saw an eagle who was injured in . He was very scared and he didn’t want to help it. But with the gentlement, he went near eagle and helped. And the eagle also thanked him. Erzi countinued(chính tả) going. But in AT this time, there were WAS aN orge family went to. Erzi wanted to escape but he couldn’t. He was captured to a dark and tall tower. Erzi was in the highest room of this tower. He heard that orge family were going to eat him. Erzi cried and he wanted to escaped (escape). When he was disappointed, the eagle landed in the tower and brought him to escaped (escape)the tower. The orge family saw that and they chased to (BỎ TO) Erzi. They threw stones to attack the eagle. Eagle dropped Erzi into TO the ground. And this time, the horse helped him. The horse ran so fast but the orge family chased very near. The horse went into the river and dropped Erzi into the boat. And this time, orge family couldn’t chase Erzi. The boat drove Erzi to his grandmother house. Erzi came back and hugged his grandmother. He explained anything TO with his grandmother. He said : “ Sorry grandmother ! I knew I was wrong . I promised I won’t be giddy “. Then his grandmother agreed to forgive for bỏ him. After all, Erzi and his grandmother lived all life in their countryside happily.

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