fairy tale

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Once upon a time, in a faraway land, there was a young girl called Cinderella. She was living happily with her family when her mother died. He father married an evil widow with 2 daughters just Cinderella's age. They mistreated Cinderella. She had to wear old clothes and worked hard while the sisters wore nice clothes and had fun. She finally became a servant in the house. One day, they received an invitation from the palace. They are invited to the ball at the palace. Her stepmother and sisters preparing carefully to the ball but Cinderella was forced to be at home. She cried and a bright light appeared in the chimney. A good witch came to help her. She turned Cinderella into a gorgeous princess with a beautiful horse carriage. Cinderella went to the ball and the price politely asked her to dance with him, but suddenly, Cinderella left the ball in hurry that he couldn't follow her. Luckily, she left a glass slipper. The prince used that to find her. Then, they got married and lived happily ever after.
Sửa hộ mk nha!!!!!!

 

[namnam06]

Once upon a time, in a faraway land, there was a young girl called Cinderella. She was living happily with her family when her mother died. He father married an evil widow with 2 daughters just Cinderella's age. They mistreated Cinderella. She had to wear old clothes and worked hard while the sisters wore nice clothes and had fun. She finally became a servant in the house. One day, they received an invitation from the palace. They are invited to the ball at the palace. Her stepmother and sisters preparing carefully to the ball but Cinderella was forced to be at home. She cried and a bright light appeared in the chimney. A good witch came to help her. She turned Cinderella into a gorgeous princess with a beautiful horse carriage. Cinderella went to the ball and the price politely asked her to dance with him, but suddenly, Cinderella left the ball in hurry that he couldn't follow her. Luckily, she left a glass slipper. The prince used that to find her. Then, they got married and lived happily ever after.
Sửa hộ mk nha!!!!!!

Once upon a time, in a faraway land, there was a young girl called Cinderella. Her mother died when she was living happily with her family. He father married again with an evil widow who had 2 daughters just at Cinderella's age. They mistreated Cinderella. She had to wear old clothes and worked hard while the sisters wore nice clothes and had fun. She finally became a servant in the house. One day, they received an invitation from the palace. They are invited to the ball at the palace. Her stepmother and sisters preparing carefully to the ball but Cinderella was forced to be at home. She cried and a bright light appeared in the chimney. A good witch came to help her. She turned Cinderella into a gorgeous princess with a beautiful carriage. Cinderella went to the ball and the price politely asked her to dance with him. They had a wonderful time, but suddenly, Cinderella left the ball in hurry that he couldn't follow her. Luckily, she left a glass slipper. Then the prince used it to find her. After that, they got married and lived happily ever after.
Mk đã sửa lại vài cái theo mk nghĩ

 

[phuongdaitt1]

Once upon a time, in a faraway land, there was a young girl called Cinderella. She was living happily with her family when her mother died. He father married an evil widow with 2 daughters just Cinderella's age. They mistreated Cinderella. She had to wear old clothes and worked hard while the sisters wore nice clothes and had fun. She finally became a servant in the house. One day, they received an invitation from the palace. They are invited to the ball at the palace. Her stepmother and sisters preparing carefully to the ball but Cinderella was forced to be at home. She cried and a bright light appeared in the chimney. A good witch came to help her. She turned Cinderella into a gorgeous princess with a beautiful horse carriage. Cinderella went to the ball and the price politely asked her to dance with him, but suddenly, Cinderella left the ball in hurry that he couldn't follow her. Luckily, she left a glass slipper. The prince used that to find her. Then, they got married and lived happily ever after.
Sửa hộ mk nha!!!!!!

Once upon a time, in a faraway land, there was a young girl called Cinderella. She was living happily with her family until her mother died. He father married again with a stepmother who had 2 daughters just at Cinderella's age. They were very mean to Cinderella. She had to wear old clothes and worked hard while the sisters wore nice clothes and had fun. She finally became a servant in the house. One day, they received an invitation from the palace. They were invited to the Prince's ball at the royal palace. Her stepmother and sisters were preparing carefully for the ball but Cinderella was forced to be at home. She cried and a bright light appeared in the chimney (???). A good witch came to help her. She turned Cinderella into a gorgeous princess with a beautiful carriage. Cinderella went to the ball and the prince politely asked her to dance with him. They had a wonderful time. Suddenly, Cinderella left the ball in a hurry that he couldn't follow her. Luckily, she left a glass slipper. Then the prince used it to find her. After that, they got married and lived happily ever after.

Bài của bạn cũng tốt, nhưng có 1 vài chỗ tóm tắt vẫn chưa chuẩn nhé.
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Cảm ơn bạn đã đến với diễn đàn HOCMAI khi cần trao đổi, chúng tôi trân trọng sự cố gắng của bạn. Chúng tôi sẽ luôn ở đây và hỗ trợ bạn hết mình. Cố lên bạn nhé!

 

[Narumi04]

Once upon a time, in a faraway land, there was a young girl called Cinderella. Her mother died when she was living happily with her family. He father married again with a stepmother who had 2 daughters just at Cinderella's age. They were very mean to Cinderella. She had to wear old clothes and worked hard while the sisters wore nice clothes and had fun. She finally became a servant in the house. One day, they received an invitation from the palace. They were invited to the Prince's ball at the royal palace. Her stepmother and sisters were preparing carefully for the ball but Cinderella was forced to be at home. She cried and a bright light appeared in the chimney (???). A good witch came to help her. She turned Cinderella into a gorgeous princess with a beautiful carriage. Cinderella went to the ball and the prince politely asked her to dance with him. They had a wonderful time. Suddenly, Cinderella left the ball in a hurry that he couldn't follow her. Luckily, she left a glass slipper. Then the prince used it to find her. After that, they got married and lived happily ever after.

Bài của bạn cũng tốt, nhưng có 1 vài chỗ tóm tắt vẫn chưa chuẩn nhé.
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Cảm ơn bạn đã đến với diễn đàn HOCMAI khi cần trao đổi, chúng tôi trân trọng sự cố gắng của bạn. Chúng tôi sẽ luôn ở đây và hỗ trợ bạn hết mình. Cố lên bạn nhé!

Theo t thì ý câu 2 là bạn ấy là cô ấy đang sống vui vẻ thì mẹ qua đời, dùng until ở giữa câu là được, lật lại cứ thấy thay đổi ý nghĩa sao sao ấy
#phuongdaitt1: Oki, để edit lại nha. Thanks nhiều ^^