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Star Academy - Kết quả vòng cá nhân - Viết văn

Tiếp theo là 2 bài viết tham gia vòng cá nhân.

-Bài viết của bạn nhuquynhdat với "Long live Vietnam"

As we know, in the past, our country - Vietnam were dominated by China for more than four thousand years. Although we fought bravely, China have never given up ambition of conquest our country. Nowadays, China are more stronger and our country are still on the rise, they unhestitstingly conflict sovereignty with us.
In my opinion, this is no longer our own problem, this is whole world's issue. China blatantly set a rig called HD 981 in Vietnam's exclusive economic area and continental shelf. Moreover, China consecutively allowed their ship attack our fishing vessels, injured Vietnamese fishermen. Conversely, Vietnam keep trying to maintain the friendship with China, hope that China will stop their silly actions. Friends all over the world can see that Vietnam have no intention of using weapons and firmly solve this issue in the most peaceful way. Our govement believe that friends all over the world will stand on our side and together we can change China's insane ambition.
As a Vietnamese citizen, we must believe in our goverment and obey our policy. we must stop doing silly actions, and express our patiotism in a right way. Many countrys and world organizations trenchantly condemned threatening security and free shipping actions of China. Students like us, except trying to study, we can support our policy, condemn China goverment's actions and call everybody to stand on our side by writing some meaningful articles or essays like this. without using weapons, we can still quench China's ambition.

~> Cách diễn đạt ý khá tốt, phân chia ý theo đoạn cũng khá tốt. Tuy nhiên nhiều chổ sai ngữ pháp, sai cấu trúc và chưa nắm chắc cấu trúc bài essay

-Bài làm của bạn tahoangthaovy với "South China Sea Dispute"

~>
Nowadays, the conflict of territory solving in the world causes many complicated problems among countries, as well as tensions in foreign policies. One of these conflicts is the dispute in South China Sea between China and six neighbor ASEAN countries. The issue turns to be more serious as it attracts a lot of concerns from international community. We are trying to find a clear way of understanding the South China Sea conflict, specifically about the effort of China and Vietnam to gain the control over the two groups of islands: Paracel and Spratly. In reality, the dispute is still up for debates and it still needs more and more talks and balancing policies from all sides.

In the Southeast Asian region lays a body of water and islands which have been disputed about for the possession of them. This area by international term is known as the “South China Sea.” (Keep in mind that they do not have any correlations with China but it is rather just an international name.) This body of water runs along territories belonging to China, Vietnam, Malaysia, Brunei, Philippines, and many other countries. Within this body of water, there are well over 200 islands which are un-inhabited by people and contain useful resources. Considering that the sea does not surround just one country which can claim authority over it, it is difficult to determine who has the right to these islands. There are no laws on who these islands belong to. This dispute brings into many questions about sovereignty, law of the sea, and resource ownership rights on an international level if more than one country surrounds the sea. This is also representative of the economic relations among countries in the larger Asia-Pacific region, especially in the South China Sea area. Its dynamic and cooperative approach to economic matters has attracted more partnerships with various countries and organizations across the globe. The area is potentially rich in oil and natural gas deposits. The South China Sea territorial dispute has become one of the most problematic issues in recent times. Current trends as well as complications resulting from China’s rise and its conflict with anxious neighbors have seemingly put any solution out of reach in the near future. However, there are still steps that rival claimants can take in order minimize the chance of major conflict.

There are several factors which affect the final and ultimate solution of the dispute. China rejects any concession on the territory issue based on the consideration of domestic politics. Similar considerations are made in other claimant countries. In recent years, sovereignty issue has become so sensitive that claimants have purposely avoided touching upon it in one track official discussions and negotiations. Another factor is the difference in the expectation of scale of involvement in discussions and negotiations. China rejects multilateral negotiation and strongly objects internationalizing the dispute, while other claimants prefer the opposite, hoping to balance China’s superiority in the region.

The dispute on South China Sea can be solved with measures which have been used in successful settlement of other disputes. For example, a legal solution will be quick and lasting. By adopting a legal solution, all claimants will agree to submit the dispute for arbitration to the International Court of Justice (ICJ) who will judge the dispute according to the international laws applicable. By adopting a political solution, all parties will discuss the dispute in formal occasions, either at bilateral or multilateral levels. Other measures such as Confidence Building Measures (CBM) can also be applied to avoid further conflict and promote understanding among claimants. By holding informal meetings and carrying out cooperative projects, claimants can accumulate confidence and understanding.

In the case of the South China Sea dispute, since most of the claimants are reluctant to resolve the sovereignty issue through any of the approaches, a permanent peace is unlikely to achieve for the time being. However, temporary peace is possible. Peace can be obtained when claimants’ interests are attended to. Comparing to the interest of sovereignty, the other two interests are comparatively easier to accomplish, namely security of sea lanes and exploration of natural resources. First, stability and security of the South China Sea are necessary for the economic development of all claimants. Second, previous efforts of all claimants have laid foundation to further carry on negotiations cooperation on issues except territorial claims. In this regard, China’s proposal of setting aside dispute will be a wise choice for all claimants.

In conclusion, Vietnam encourage the sides to maintain dialogue with each other, but we’re not going to weigh in on speculation about their location and what it means.

~> Bạn này là 1 trong những lí do khiến BTC đưa kết quả lâu, chấm thôi cũng đủ mỏi hết con mắt rồi... Bạn nắm được cấu trúc làm bài essay, diễn đạt ý tốt, đi sâu vào vấn đề cần bàn luận và lập luận rất chặt chẽ. Tuy vẫn còn 1 chút chổ sai nhưng xét tổng thể thì khá ổn

------Các bài còn lại sẽ được post trong thời gian ngắn nhất có thể-------
 
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Star Academy - Vòng cá nhân - Viết

Tiếp theo là 2 bài viết của kienduc_vatli và xuanquynh97

-Kienduc_vatli với "ENGLISH ESSAY ABOUT THE EAST SEA NOW"

I would like to present to you my thoughts about the South China Sea now!
A situation is being attention of Asian countries ,that is being China sovereignty dispute East Sea with Vietnam.
China says East Sea belongs to the China and they are carrying out the plot to usurp East Sea
Why China Wants East Sea?
The "lust" monopolize the East Sea of China not just energy, fisheries, but there is also a strategic nuclear submarine of China
The employment of China in East Sea is very absurd. Chinese's ship always rammed the Vietnam's ship, although Vietnam's ships don’t friction with them. They use water cannons to attack Vietnam’ ship, make the ships of fishermen is badly damaged. Not only that, China also arbitrarily set the rig on the East Sea to exploit resources. They are too unruly! In the world, many countries have protested this action of China. A senior U.S. official said that the aggressive behavior of China's sovereignty claims in the South China Sea not only promote increased stress but also detrimental to the international status of the country. But China remained indifferent, says his work is right
In situation of Vietnam, many Vietnam people actively oppose China. however, many people abuse this situation was disrupting security. Our people is Vietnam , let's do something useful for the country Vietnam. Students like us, try learning to defend the country !

~> Cách làm bài essay của em chưa ổn lắm! Có một số chổ không thống nhất từ, lúc số ít, lúc số nhiều, còn diễn đạt nhiều theo văn nói. Một số chổ dùng không đúng ngữ pháp...

-Xuanquynh97 với "Paracel Islands-Spratly Islands in Vietnam ownership"

Vietnam Island-Hoang Sa and Truong Sa are part of the territory of Vietnam, over thousand century it is always tied to the life of the inhabitants of Vietnam both physically and mentally. Consequently, the Island in consciousness of Vietnam people is the national; the life ; and the actual history of thousands of years Vietnam people have tried to explore and ready sacrifice for sovereignty of island Vietnam.
Vietnam has a long coastline, large continental shelf, there are more than 3,000 islands. VietNam Sea have potential resources such as: notably minerals and oil and gas, and many kinds of minerals, abundant seafood … Our sea is also particularly important position of military. The Historys shows that in 14 wars by aggression enemies, our country was having 10 wars to the sea. Our sea alway associated with spiritual values and sacred history: the legend of Lac Long Quan and Au Co, the historic victory of Bach Dang, old Van Don, Con Co , legendary road of Ho Chi Minh in American War… They has created mental force for news pedigree. However, we don’t cognitive worths and the importance of sea. And nowaday, China put down illicit HD-981 oil drilling rig in territories. Therefore our bjectives and tasks of defense and security is firmly safeguard the independence, sovereignty, unity, territorial integrity; sovereignty sea, islands, border and airspace; protect the Party, State and the residential. Firmly protect maritime sea Vietnam sovereignty is the sacred responsibility of every citizen of Vietnam to the nation's history, is an important factor to ensure that our people for sustainable development.

~>Mình chỉ đưa ra một số lỗi chính, chưa nắm kĩ cấu trúc của bài essay. Một số dùng sai từ, sai cấu trúc...
 
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Star Academy - vòng cá nhân - Viết văn
Đây là những bài cuối cùng của phần thi viết

-angleofdarkness

Nowaday, there is an important issue about conflicting sovereignty between China and Vietnam. Early December 5/2014, China pervaded blatantly and put HD 981 rig illegally in the exclusive economic zone of Vietnam. They had aggressive actions in order to prevent Vietnam Coast Guard from enforcing Vietnam law. They have seriously violated Vietnam's sovereignty under the United Nations Convention on the Law of the Sea (UNCLOS) in 1982. The serious situation, which has been happening in the South China Sea, has awakened patriotism of over 90 million Vietnameses and over 4 million overseas Vietnameses in orther countries. People who love peace all over the world always bolster us and protest Chinese putting HD 981 rig.

However, with the current situation, I think we have to calm down and be discerning to propound judicious actions or ideas. We must perceive many exploitations from bad guys or domestic reactionaries. Many people in Binh Duong province and Ha Tinh province rebelled, broke not only Chinese companies but also orthers foreign companies. It depraved Vietnam man image, so I hope we should equip strong morale and always supply all requirements whenever our homeland needs.

~> Câu cú khá ổn song cấu trúc của bài essay chưa vững

-thoconcute với "Sovereignty"

Sovereignty is a sacred word of all countries in the world. It is not only peole’s life but it’s also their own national pride. The Vietnamese nation’s sovereignty is the only and they don’t allow anyone to invade. These days, there is an important issue concerns about conflicting sovereignty between China and Vietnam. It quickly becomes hot news all over the world. In my opinion, Vietnam and the Vietnamese nation must have their own justice because their sovereignty has been in being and they can even prove their right! Vietnamese’s sovereignty is their own language – vietnamese and their history.

First of all, Vietnamese is an important thing to make Vietname grander. Some countries in the world haven’t had their own languages and they must borrow from other countries. However, with Vietnam, Vietnamese is chosen as their first language and no one, no country can have it as their mother tongue. Vietnamese makes its country and the Vietnamese nation proud of. This is the reason why their sovereignty must be the only.

Another important thing is Vietnamese’s history. Since the dawn of life in Vietnam, people have known how to fight to defend their nation. The Vietnamese nation have always affirmed that Vietnam is the land of freedom and happiness, they don’t allow anyone to invade their country.

Therefore, I firmly believe that one day, the Vietnamese nation will defeat every aggressors to protect their nation. “Hoang Sa” and “Truong Sa’’ is Vietnam’s!

~> Mặc dù nghĩa chưa sâu nhưng diễn đạt ý khá tốt. Nắm được cấu trúc cơ bản của bài essay

-t_point

As you know, nowadays the issue about conflicting sovereignty between China and Vietnam is extremely strained. A war can happen at any time, which makes people in both countries very alarmed. Today, as a citizen of Vietnam, I 'd like to express my opinion.

In the past , the Vietnam - China relationship was a hot topic . Did you know why? It was because we were neighbors, bordered on land and sea, had the sticking process of cultural interaction history as well as the wars between the two countries .All these things made the relationship extremely complex and sensitive.

Now, China and Vietnam both have claims to the Paracel and Spratly Islands. However, most experts agree that all Chinese claims are absurd. For example, since the beginning of May, 2014 , China has placed an oil rig just far from 150 nautical miles off Vietnam's coast. Vietnam has said the Haiyang Shiyou 981 rig is in its 200-nautical mile exclusive economic zone and on its continental shelf. Then, on May 26 , in waters of the South China Sea well within Vietnam's exclusive economic zone, one of the Chinese ships rammed into a Vietnamese boat and sank it. Chinese Foreign Ministry spokesman Qin Gang shamelessly denied the fact and claimed that this fishing boat had capsized after ramming a Chinese boat. As another example, China decided to occupy some islets, rocks and shoals was to establish territorial baselines, which reverses the intent of the UNCLOS definition. Certainly UNCLOS did not intend to create a silly game for nations to build or occupy little islets 400 miles apart, and thereby begin to own and possess all the oceans in the world, which seems to be the silly game that China is playing.

To be honest , the fact that Vietnam has been suppressed all of these years by China makes me very angry. Then, I realize that " Hatred is as blind as love". A lot of bad people are trying to start a war so we should be calm down to be able think straight . It would be nice if China and Vietnam came to some agreement over the Paracel Islands. But it does not meant that we will let the Chinese do whatever they want. We will try our best to protect our sovereignty through diplomatic measures and show the world our patriotism and friendliness without disturbing the public order or adversely affecting our national image and reputation. In case of war, I am willing to die for my country.

In summary, I want to emphasize that "United we stand, divided we fall" - It is high time for us to form a giant circle to unite our country so that we are able to solve the issue about conflicting sovereignty between China and Vietnam .

~> Cấu trúc câu, ngôn từ và cách viết theo cấu trúc của bài essay khá tốt

-demon311 với "CHINA'S ILLEGAL ACTIONS"

At this time, there are two issue that are concerned by all nations in the world. The former is the instable status of Ukraine. The latter is about the conflicting sovereignty between China and Vietnam. The latter is really, really a sensitive issue. China's rampage actions did threaten the peace and the international sercurity. So why they are so reckless like that? What is the purposes of those unilateral actions?
First unilateral action of China is putting down illegally the oil rig Haiyang-981 in Vietnam's EEZ (exclusive economic zone). This make netizens and many countries show their protests to this issue. USA, Japan, Philippines, EU, ... expressed their concerns. China wanted to enlarge their territorial waters to Paracel and Spratly Islands, which have never been theirs in the history. So this action is illegal and it can break the peace and stable of this area.
I am Vietnamese, so I am really pressing about China's actions. We are Vietnamese, with a heroic history. Paracel and Spratly Islands are ours. China'a allegation about dotted line (or nine-dash line) is wrong and rubbishly. We have to fight for our sovereignty.
WE PROTEST CHINA'S ILLEGAL ACTIONS IN SOUTH CHINE SEA.

~> Nắm được câu trúc bài essay, ngôn từ cũng khá ổn, tuy nhiên có một số chổ dùng sai cấu trúc ngữ pháp...

-toiyeu9a3:

Sovereignty disputes between Vietnam and China are the burning issues of the news. Fuzes for this war is that China placed down illegally rig called HD-981 in the sea of Vietnam's sovereignty, in addition to the implicit cause of the conflict on the islands Hoang Sa and Truong Sa. So how has this incident impacted to the Vietnameses - one country that loves peace and justice? Certainly, it will raise up passionate love - things that could engulf the invaders’ clique as Uncle Ho has confirmed. Passion with the country is manifested on all over the country, people protested at the Chinese embassy gates opposed the war, and nationals in tightened hand, yang red flag with yellow star high , chanted "Hoang Sa, Truong Sa belong to Vietnam". That love was expressed through action good leaves protect torn leaves, through supporting money to build the home island, the mainland became firm rear to marine soldiers are strong fighters, in any situation any case they are always persistent strengthen protection firm seas and islands, the sacred continental shelf of the fatherland. Love was also burned in the written submissions of the home islands, passionate belief, the pride of a nation never backing down in history.
It was about several months since China put down illegally HD -981. A powerful Chinese with the navy ships, guardian missile ship, aircraft extravagant intimidate, threaten chase, tamponade, water injection toVietnam ships, attack Vietnamese fishmen, rob of their property. Moreover insidious and cunning by nature, China was abusing patriotism of our people to induce they to vandalism Chinese’ factories, they are automatically screened films contrary to the fact that Vietnam puncture Chinese fishing boat , in international forum they also profusely blame Vietnam. Although China has guns, modern weapons, Vietnamese people always know "taking good to win violent , getting intellectual to replace the terrible." And of course ambition will not stand in a civilized society.
So what do we need to do when the country is facing the brink? With the developed world, the political conflict would give way to economic race. You know right after this conflict of flights’ Airlines airline reduced, then the items exported to China reduced prices to record levels. So we have youth and wisdom, turn to dear Fatherland, use your brain to take a Vietnam developed magically as Japan have ever done.

~> Nắm được cấu trúc cơ bản của essay song một số chổ dùng sai từ, sai ngữ pháp

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thuong0504

Star Academy - Vòng cá nhân - Kết quả phần thi viết

Sau một thời gian cân đo, đong đếm, BTC đã quyết định tìm ra top 7 người có khả năng viết tốt, hay và chính xác nhất... Và trước khi thông báo top 7, BTC đã nhận được 1 tin nhắn, có thể xem như một "đơn tố cáo" từ một thành viên không tham gia thi nhưng ít nhiều cũng gắn bó với event này, họ đã gửi cho BTC một đường link và BTC thật sự thất vọng khi đọc bài trong đường link đó,... Có một thí sinh đã không tự mình làm bài, copy bài trên mạng để nộp... BTC sẽ loại quyền thi đấu của bạn này dù điểm cao hay thấp!

Và đây... đây là top 7 người có bài viết xuất sắc nhất:

t_point|10
thoconcute|9
toiyeu9a3|8
demon311|7
angleofdarkness|6
trangbui35|5
nhuquynhdat|4

Congratulation!
 
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thuong0504

Star Academy - Kết quả - Nhìn hình đoán chữ
Dù chưa tới "time up" nhưng số lượng bài đúng đã đạt từ lâu rồi nên mình post kết quả luôn nhé! Kẻo tối nay mất điện nữa thi mệt

Đáp án: Vo Nguyen Giap Viet Minh Commander; general Vo Nguyen Giap; Vietnamese general Vo Nguyen Giap

Và đây là 7 bạn nhanh và chính xác nhất: ( Có 1 số bạn gửi ngay khi xem xong gợi ý 1 ;)) ) và dĩ nhiên là những bạn này trả lời bằng Tiếng Anh, đầy đủ và đúng

thoconcute|10
demon311|9
Angleofdarkness|8
kienduc_vatli|7
toiyeu9a3|6
hobaoanh123|5
t_point|4

Trong đó rất tiếc cho chị t_point vì lúc đầu chị đã đúng khi đang ở vị trí thứ 3, sau thỏ và quỷ. Nhưng rốt cuộc thì..... :|

Congratulation!

Mọi người nhớ đọc kĩ thông báo nhé!
 
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thuong0504

Star Academy - Kết quả cuối cùng của vòng cá nhân

Trước tiên là top 3 bạn được điểm ưu tiên do vòng nhóm đạt điểm cao, mỗi bạn cộng 1 điểm:

Tên thành viên|Điểm vòng nhóm
angleofdarkness|70,5
cherrynguyen_298 |69
kienduc_vatli|68

Tiếp theo điểm của từng bạn trong vòng cá nhân:

Tên thành viên|Điểm vòng cá nhân
1.thoconcute|38
2.t_point|31
3.kienduc_vatli|20
4.xuanquynh97|12
5.angleofdarkness|21
6.trang.bui35|16
7.demon311|30
8.Nhuquynhdat|15
9.toiyeu9a3|14
10.hobaoanh123|5

Và cuối cùng, Top 5 thí sinh lọt vào vòng chung kết sắp hiện diện...:

1.thoconcute|38
2.t_point|31
3.demon311|30
4.angleofdarkness|22
5.kienduc_vatli|21

Congratulation! Các bạn là những người xuất sắc nhất bám trụ đến bây giờ, chờ đợi thông báo để biết được lịch thi và cách thức thi nhé! Vòng chung kết sẽ không tính điểm của vòng cá nhân này nữa, chỉ cộng điểm ưu tiên (1điểm) cho top 2 thôi nhé!
 
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thuong0504

Star Academy - Kết quả chung kết

Đáp án đợt I

1. Misunderstanding
2. By stretching a rope from one side of the crevasse to the other, they were able to haul their equipment across.
3. Jane didn't expect to win the competition, but she went in for it anyway
4. Those boys shouldn’t be left alone or the place will be torn down. Hoặc: Don't let these boys be left alone or the place will be torn down.
5. Rose said that she was just leaving the office when she came face to face with the stranger.

Số câu đúng và thứ tự thời gian của top 5 nhé!

1.angleofdarkness:2/5
2.thoconcute:4/5
3.demon311:2/5
4.kienduc_vatli:2/5 ( châm chước chữ a, vì sang tường thuật, stranger đã xác định nên đặt sau the)
5.t_point:4/5

Cộng 1 điểm cho 2 bài làm vượt quá 70% và về sớm nhất – nhì. Đợt này chỉ có bạn Thoconcute được cộng 1 điểm nhé! T_point nộp cuối nên hơi tiếc…

Đáp án đợt II

Firework - thien0526
A little star - thuong0504

Người duy nhất trả lời đúng và nhanh nhất là thoconcute. Chị t_point trả lời đúng nhưng trả lời cuối cùng, sau thỏ.... Tiếc quá

___________________________

Vậy là top 3 đã hiện diện

Về nhất: Thoconcute

Về nhì: t_point

Về 3: Có 3 người cùng điểm, vì vật xét hoạt động trong Box, độ tích cực, phong độ trong thời gian thì vừa qua..... thì...... Xin chúc mừng bạn về thứ 3 là.............

=))

Demon311

Congratulation! Giải thưởng sẽ được gửi sau nhé! ( chờ ad duyệt nữa... :D )
 
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