co ai xem dùm mình bai nay k???

[pety_love2000]

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mình mới làm đó, nhưng không bik có sai ngữ pháp k nữa,

I remembered the most enjoyable vacation I spent was in grade 12. My class decided to travel to Vung Tau. In the morning, we got up early to catch bus. Three hours later, we were there. Beach! I saw that first scene. That was Nghinh Phong beach. It was very nice. We loved swimming. I liked picking up shells and building sand castles. My class leader thought a very interesting game. Girls in my class did not know what game it is. Until we were suddenly thrown into the water. We drank a lot of sea water. Of course, boys could not escape our retaliation. After eating, we went to visit more places. In the afternoon, the sky was very beautiful sunset. After watching the sun, we left that beautiful place and came back home. Athough this holiday was not long, I felt very happy. Moreover, it gave us a lot of good memories of time students.

 

[hocvien7]

"That was Nghinh Phong beach"--> theo mình câu này nên sửa vì bãi biển ở đây là cố định vẫn thuộc 1 địa điểm ko thay đổi do đó bạn nên dùng là "is Nghinh Phuong beach".
"My class leader thought a very interesting game"-->My class leader thought a very interesting games.
Đây là ý kiến của mình .

 

[tomcangxanh]

mình mới làm đó, nhưng không bik có sai ngữ pháp k nữa,

I remembered the most enjoyable vacation I spent was in grade 12. My class decided to travel to Vung Tau. In the morning, we got up early to catch bus. Three hours later, we were there. Beach! I saw that first scene\Rightarrowthat scene first hay hơn. That was Nghinh Phong beach. It was very nice. We loved swimming. I liked picking up shells and building sand castles. My class leader thought a very interesting game. Girls in my class did not know what game it is\Rightarrowwas. Until \Rightarrownối thành 1 câuwe were suddenly thrown into the water. We drank a lot of sea water. Of course, boys could not escape our retaliation. After eating, we went to visit more places. In the afternoon, the sky was very beautiful sunset\Rightarrowko nằm ở đây đc. After watching the sun, we left that beautiful place and came back home. Athough this holiday was not long, I felt very happy. Moreover, it gave us a lot of good memories of time students.

"That was Nghinh Phong beach"--> theo mình câu này nên sửa vì bãi biển ở đây là cố định vẫn thuộc 1 địa điểm ko thay đổi do đó bạn nên dùng là "is Nghinh Phuong beach".
"My class leader thought a very interesting game"-->My class leader thought a very interesting games.

dùng was ok.

a ... games ?

 

[hocvien7]

theo mình thì dùng was ko ổn vì bãi biển này có chân đâu để mà chạy đi đâu, trong quá khứ và bây giờ nó vẫn ở 1 chỗ do vậy ko nên dùng was

 

[tomcangxanh]

haizzzz câu trần thuật kể về việc ngày trước đi chơi ở đâu thôi mà :| dùng was là ok. Dĩ nhiên cái chân lí là bãi biển Ở ĐÓ, nhưng bạn này muốn nói là CÁI BÃI BIỂN MÀ BẠN ẤY ĐI CHƠI là cái bãi biển ĐÓ!

 

[bavu2010_271995]

I remembered the most enjoyable vacation I spent was in grade 12. My class decided to travel to Vung Tau. In the morning, we got up early to catch bus. Three hours later, we were there. Beach! I saw that first scene. That was => has beenNghinh Phong beach. It was very nice. We loved swimming. I liked picking up shells and building sand castles. My class leader thought a very interesting game => some extremely interesting games. Girls in my class did not know what game it is => what games they were. Until we were suddenly thrown into the water. We drank a lot of sea water. It was very salty. Of course, boys could not escape our retaliation. After eating, we went to visit more beautiful places. In the afternoon, the sky was very beautiful sunset. After watching the sun, we left that beautiful place and came back home. Athough => Although this holiday was not long, I felt very happy. Moreover, it gave us a lot of good memories of time students.

Nguyen Ba Vu - Class 10A1 - Tran Quoc Tran High School - Phu Hoa District - Phu Yen Province.
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