[Chữa luận] Fast Food

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Giups em tì lỗi sai , nếu câu nào lủng củng thì giúp em vs ạ
1) thức ăn nhanh ảnh hưởng đến sức khỏe và ăn uống
In the modern life, because everyone is always busy with many works ,they have no time to relax or eat . Therefore, Fast food is the best choice for them , However , many people argue that it has negative effect on our lifestye and diet. From my point of view, I agree with this opinion .
There are many reasons why fast food is harmdul to us . First of all, it is unhealthy for our body due to the lack of nutrition. Today , there are a hundred of dirty food which is produced everyday without cencership. For example, being sold with cheap price, almost every restaurant buy inexpensive material that is very stale . As a result of that, It is the major cause of so many dangerous diseas such as diarrhea, stomach pain ...
Secondly , the habit of eating fast food spoils our diet .being busy with our works leads to eat food unproperly . We eat everwhere and everytime without timetable . This affect greatly to our diet.( thêm giúp mk vs , đang bí)
Finally , Fast food also lose our common tradition of family meals. Having meals with family has been long a way by which peole share their sadness and happiness during a hard day . Besides , parents take chance of educating their chidren about how to behave politely to the others . However , our daily life is becoming much busier , the asscociate among family's member is no longer exist
......kết
 

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Giups em tì lỗi sai , nếu câu nào lủng củng thì giúp em vs ạ
1) thức ăn nhanh ảnh hưởng đến sức khỏe và ăn uống
In the modern life, because everyone is always busy with many works ,they have no time to relax or eat . Therefore, Fast food is the best choice for them , However , many people argue that it has negative effect on our lifestye and diet. From my point of view, I agree with this opinion .
There are many reasons why fast food is harmdul to us . First of all, it is unhealthy for our body due to the lack of nutrition. Today , there are a hundred of dirty food which is produced everyday without cencership. For example, being sold with cheap price, almost every restaurant buy inexpensive material that is very stale . As a result of that, It is the major cause of so many dangerous diseas such as diarrhea, stomach pain ...
Secondly , the habit of eating fast food spoils our diet .being busy with our works leads to eat food unproperly . We eat everwhere and everytime without timetable . This affect greatly to our diet.( thêm giúp mk vs , đang bí)
Finally , Fast food also lose our common tradition of family meals. Having meals with family has been long a way by which peole share their sadness and happiness during a hard day . Besides , parents take chance of educating their chidren about how to behave politely to the others . However , our daily life is becoming much busier , the asscociate among family's member is no longer exist
......kết
1) thức ăn nhanh ảnh hưởng đến sức khỏe và ăn uống
In the modern life, because everyone is always busy with many works ,they have no time to eat or relax . Therefore, Fast food is the best choice for them. However, many people argue that it has negative effects on our lifestyle and diet. From my point of view, I agree with this opinion .
There are many reasons why fast food is harmful to us . First of all, it is unhealthy for our body due to its lack of nutrition. Today, there are hundreds of dirty food which is produced everyday without censorship . For example, being sold with cheap price , almost every restaurant buy inexpensive material that is very stale . (..........??????????) Mình dường như chả hiểu ý của câu này, ngay cả đem câu này vào google dịch :v
As a result of that, this is the main reason for a lot of many dangerous diseases such as diarrhea, stomach pain ...

Secondly , the habit of eating fast food spoils our diet. Being busy with our works leads us to eat food improperly . We eat anytime and anywhere without timetable . This affects our diet greatly.( thêm giúp mk vs , đang bí)
Bạn có thể thêm vào các tác hại cho câu bạn đưa ra. Tại sao lại ảnh hưởng đến chế độ ăn uống ? (Với lại cái luận điểm này cũng không thể nói nhiều được, bạn nên thay thế bằng 1 cái khác)
Finally , Fast food also lose our common tradition of family meals. Having meals with family has been long a way. During this time, people share their sadness and happiness after a hard-working day . Besides , parents take chance of educating their children about how to behave politely to the others . However , our daily life is becoming much busier , the association among family members is no longer exist
......kết
@Narumi04 coi thử xem còn chỗ nào cần chữa không, cảm ơn nhiều nha :D
Bài còn sai khá nhiều lỗi, còn nhiều chỗ diễn đạt còn sai ngữ pháp
Mà mới bắt đầu như vậy thì cũng không tồi :D cố lên nhé
 
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1) thức ăn nhanh ảnh hưởng đến sức khỏe và ăn uống
In the modern life, because everyone is always busy with many works ,they have no time to eat or relax . Therefore, Fast food is the best choice for them. However, many people argue that it has negative effects on our lifestyle and diet. From my point of view, I agree with this opinion .
There are many reasons why fast food is harmful to us . First of all, it is unhealthy for our body due to its lack of nutrition. Today, there are hundreds of dirty food which is produced everyday without censorship . For example, being sold with cheap price , almost every restaurant buy inexpensive material that is very stale . (..........??????????) Mình dường như chả hiểu ý của câu này, ngay cả đem câu này vào google dịch :v
As a result of that, this is the main reason for a lot of many dangerous diseases such as diarrhea, stomach pain ...

Secondly , the habit of eating fast food spoils our diet. Being busy with our works leads us to eat food improperly . We eat anytime and anywhere without timetable . This affects our diet greatly.( thêm giúp mk vs , đang bí)
Bạn có thể thêm vào các tác hại cho câu bạn đưa ra. Tại sao lại ảnh hưởng đến chế độ ăn uống ? (Với lại cái luận điểm này cũng không thể nói nhiều được, bạn nên thay thế bằng 1 cái khác)
Finally , Fast food also lose our common tradition of family meals. Having meals with family has been long a way. During this time, people share their sadness and happiness after a hard-working day . Besides , parents take chance of educating their children about how to behave politely to the others . However , our daily life is becoming much busier , the association among family members is no longer exist
......kết
@Narumi04 coi thử xem còn chỗ nào cần chữa không, cảm ơn nhiều nha :D
Bài còn sai khá nhiều lỗi, còn nhiều chỗ diễn đạt còn sai ngữ pháp
Mà mới bắt đầu như vậy thì cũng không tồi :D cố lên nhé
à mà ad ơi nếu em muốn viết : Hầu như các cửa hàng đều bán thức ăn với giá rẻ phù hợp vói người tiêu dùng mà cũng muốn làm lợi cá nhân nên học chọn thực phẩm rẻ thậm chí là độc hại
em ms đăng 1 bài lên nhờ ad sử giùm ạ
 

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à mà ad ơi nếu em muốn viết : Hầu như các cửa hàng đều bán thức ăn với giá rẻ phù hợp vói người tiêu dùng mà cũng muốn làm lợi cá nhân nên học chọn thực phẩm rẻ thậm chí là độc hại
em ms đăng 1 bài lên nhờ ad sử giùm ạ
Almost all shops sell foods with prices which are suitable for customer. However, the owners of these shops are self-serving. They want to buy cheap ingredients although these ingredients can affect our health.
 
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1) thức ăn nhanh ảnh hưởng đến sức khỏe và ăn uống
In the modern life, because everyone is always busy with many works ,they have no time to eat or relax . Therefore, Fast food is the best choice for them. However, many people argue that it has negative effects on our lifestyle and diet. From my point of view, I agree with this opinion .
There are many reasons why fast food is harmful to us . First of all, it is unhealthy for our body due to its lack of nutrition. Today, there are hundreds of dirty food which is produced everyday without censorship . For example, being sold with cheap price , almost every restaurant buy inexpensive material that is very stale . (..........??????????) Mình dường như chả hiểu ý của câu này, ngay cả đem câu này vào google dịch :v
As a result of that, this is the main reason for a lot of many dangerous diseases such as diarrhea, stomach pain ...

Secondly , the habit of eating fast food spoils our diet. Being busy with our works leads us to eat food improperly . We eat anytime and anywhere without timetable . This affects our diet greatly.( thêm giúp mk vs , đang bí)
Bạn có thể thêm vào các tác hại cho câu bạn đưa ra. Tại sao lại ảnh hưởng đến chế độ ăn uống ? (Với lại cái luận điểm này cũng không thể nói nhiều được, bạn nên thay thế bằng 1 cái khác)
Finally , Fast food also lose our common tradition of family meals. Having meals with family has been long a way. During this time, people share their sadness and happiness after a hard-working day . Besides , parents take chance of educating their children about how to behave politely to the others . However , our daily life is becoming much busier , the association among family members is no longer exist
......kết
@Narumi04 coi thử xem còn chỗ nào cần chữa không, cảm ơn nhiều nha :D
Bài còn sai khá nhiều lỗi, còn nhiều chỗ diễn đạt còn sai ngữ pháp
Mà mới bắt đầu như vậy thì cũng không tồi :D cố lên nhé
Almost all shops sell foods with prices which are suitable for customer. However, the owners of these shops are self-serving. They want to buy cheap ingredients although these ingredients can affect our health.
Almost all shops sell foods with prices which are suitable for customer. However, the owners of these shops are self-serving. They want to buy cheap ingredients although these ingredients can affect our health.


b ơi bn có thể giupsmk mở bài của bài này đc ko:Food-safety violations, including using improved fertilizers and toxic chemicals to produce foods, are increasing at an alarming rate. What suggestions would you give to solve these problems?
You should write about 250 words.
 
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