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Dear Mrs. Hoa,
My name is Jennifer. I’m currently a second- year student at Jamestown high school.
As far as I know, you are the homeroom teacher of the first year class. So I’m writing this letter to complain about your student.
In my opinion, I think that your student are the noisiest and naughtiest students I’ve seen.
Do you know ? Yesterday, I saw them thrown rubbish in the school yard and I felt very angry with that action a lots. I tried to said they couldn’t throw the garbage like that but they don’t listen. Not only that, they also mocked me.
I really feel unsastisfied about your class. I think that I would much appreciate it if you criticize and ban your student not litter at school yard. Also, you should teach your student behave properly and please ensure this sort of problem does not rise again anymore.
Your faithfully,
Jennifer

 

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Mong mọi người xem và sửa giúp, đồng thời cũng mong mọi người góp ý vào bài của mình
Dear Mrs. Hoa,
My name is Jennifer. I’m currently a second- year student at Jamestown high school.
As far as I know, you are the homeroom teacher of the first year class. So I’m writing this letter to complain about your student.
In my opinion, I think that your student are the noisiest and naughtiest students I’ve seen.
Do you know ? Yesterday, I saw them thrown rubbish in the school yard and I felt very angry with that action a lots. I tried to said they couldn’t throw the garbage like that but they don’t listen. Not only that, they also mocked me.
I really feel unsastisfied about your class. I think that I would much appreciate it if you criticize and ban your student not litter at school yard. Also, you should teach your student behave properly and please ensure this sort of problem does not rise again anymore.
Your faithfully,
Jennifer

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Dear Mrs. Hoa,
My name is Jennifer. I’m currently a second-year student at Jamestown high school. As far as I know, you are the homeroom teacher of the first-year class. So I’m writing this letter to complain about your student. I think that your student is the noisiest and naughtiest student I’ve seen. Do you know? Yesterday, I saw them thrown rubbish in the schoolyard and I felt very angry with that action a lot. I tried to said they couldn’t throw the garbage like that but they don’t listen. Not only that, but they also mocked me. I feel unsatisfied with your class. I think that I would much appreciate it if you criticize and ban your student not litter in the schoolyard. Also, you should teach your student to behave properly and please ensure this sort of problem does not arise again anymore.
Yours faithfully,
Jennifer
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Mong mọi người xem và sửa giúp, đồng thời cũng mong mọi người góp ý vào bài của mình
Dear Mrs. Hoa,
My name is Jennifer. I’m currently a second- year student at Jamestown high school.
As far as I know, you are the homeroom teacher of the first year class. So I’m writing this letter to complain about your student.
In my opinion, I think that your student are the noisiest and naughtiest students I’ve seen.
Do you know ? Yesterday, I saw them thrown rubbish in the school yard and I felt very angry with that action a lots. I tried to said they couldn’t throw the garbage like that but they don’t listen. Not only that, they also mocked me.
I really feel unsastisfied about your class. I think that I would much appreciate it if you criticize and ban your student not litter at school yard. Also, you should teach your student behave properly and please ensure this sort of problem does not rise again anymore.
Your faithfully,
Jennifer

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In my opinion, I think that your student ==> students are the noisiest and naughtiest students I’ve seen.
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I really feel unsastisfied about ==> with your class. I think that I would ==> will much appreciate it if you criticize and ban your student not litter ==> from littering at ==> in the schoolyard. Also, you should teach your student how to behave properly and please ensure this sort of problem does not rise again anymore.
Your faithfully,
Jennifer
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