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The smartphone is considered as an undeniable great invention of the world of many advantages it brings but besides advantages, it also has a lot of disadvantages affect on people,. Firstly, the smartphone can help us entertainment or work become more easy and convenient. Moreover, we can bring it anywhere we want, even bring it with us by its compactness. Secondly, we can plan work exactly or note down the essentials without a pen and paper. The connection becomes faster and finds a way when we lose or want to go someplace we don't know how to go was resolved by the help of GPS on the phone. In addition, to the benefits they bring, there are also many negatives. First, it affects to user's health, especially the eyes. Secondly, if we're not mature enough to recognize bad things, we'll be drawn in and may lead to misuse. Considerations when using the smartphone because when the excessive use of the phone will reduce external relationships, reduce interaction and user gradually narrow down to the outside as separate
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The smartphone is considered as an undeniable great invention of the world of many advantages it brings but besides advantages, it also has a lot of disadvantages affect on people,. Firstly, the smartphone can help us entertainment or work become more easy and convenient (cách thứ nhất có thể sửa thành "can help us entertain and work more easily" , cách thứ hai sửa thành "can help our entertainment and work become easier"). Moreover, we can bring it anywhere we want, even bring it with us by its compactness (câu này có thể viết gọn lại thành "Moreover, we can bring it with us anywhere we want because of its compactness). Secondly, we can plan work exactly or note down the essentials without a pen and paper. The connection becomes faster and finds-> finding a way when we lose -> get lost or want to go someplace we don't know how to go->the way(viết gọn lại thôi) was resolved by the help of GPS on the phone. In addition, to the benefits they bring, there are also many negatives. First, it affects to user's health, especially the eyes. Secondly, if we're not mature enough to recognize bad things, we'll be drawn in and may lead to misuse->being misused. Considerations->Consider(consideration là một từ thường được dùng ở dạng không đếm được, câu mệnh lệnh bắt đầu bằng [TEX]V_0[/TEX]) when using the smartphone because when the excessive use of the phone will reduce external relationships, reduce interaction and user gradually narrow down to the outside as separate->separation