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[npan_184]

[TẶNG BẠN] TRỌN BỘ Bí kíp học tốt 08 môn
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TOPIC: COMMUNITY.
There are many ways to help the community such as:
- We should provide evening classed for street children.
- We should blood for many patients in hospital.
- We should tutor younger children on provide homework help before or after school
- We should talk to and sing for elderly at a nursing home.
- We should encourage people to recycle glass, cans and paper.
- We should build a pow house for homeless people.
- Volunteer work is very benefitcal. If we spend time doing it, we will feel relax and hepless fortunate people.

 

[ahn___w]

TOPIC: COMMUNITY.
There are many ways to help the community such as:
- We should provide evening classed for street children.
- We should blood for many patients in hospital.
- We should tutor younger children on provide homework help before or after school
- We should talk to and sing for elderly at a nursing home.
- We should encourage people to recycle glass, cans and paper.
- We should build a pow house for homeless people.
- Volunteer work is very benefitcal. If we spend time doing it, we will feel relax and hepless fortunate people.

Mình nghĩ bạn nên thêm câu kết bài để bài văn hay hơn và được diễn tả tốt hơn đó!!!

 

[dmv gamer]

TOPIC: COMMUNITY.
There are many ways to help the community such as:
- We should provide evening classed for street children.
- We should blood for many patients in hospital.
- We should tutor younger children on provide homework help before or after school
- We should talk to and sing for elderly at a nursing home.
- We should encourage people to recycle glass, cans and paper.
- We should build a pow house for homeless people.
- Volunteer work is very benefitcal. If we spend time doing it, we will feel relax and hepless fortunate people.

bài văn đó mình nghĩ cần thêm vài từ nữa cho hay!

 

[npan_184]

Mình nghĩ bạn nên thêm câu kết bài để bài văn hay hơn và được diễn tả tốt hơn đó!!!

bài văn đó mình nghĩ cần thêm vài từ nữa cho hay!

cái câu cuối mình định làm câu kết á, thêm từ gì nhỉ

 

[Bella Dodo]

Bạn tham khảo

evening classed

Classes

We should blood for many

We should donate blood

on provide homework help before

By providing homework (club) help

benefitcal. If we spend time doing it, we will feel relax and hepless fortunate people.

Beneficial. Câu tiếp theo bạn có thể viết We will feel more relaxed after helping unfortunate people.
Bella

 

[ahn___w]

cái câu cuối mình định làm câu kết á, thêm từ gì nhỉ

Bạn nên chọn các từ như là "In fact, In conculsion" thì sẽ hay hơn đó!!