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hello , everyone . My name is ......I'M 12 year old. I'm study class 6E at Le Binh secondary school . Do you know that TV is very important to everyone . When we watch tv , we can easily connect to the world through the screen . it's very convenient . You definitely like watching TV , right? . That's right , because TV has so many useful programs . Many people told me that watching TV is not good , but in my opinion TV also has great benefits . Sau đây tôi sẽ giới thiệu cho các bạn một số chương trình . VTV1 gives us more knowledge about daily news . This is a news(?) . VTV2 and VTV3 often have entertaining programs.However, You should remember that the time you spend to watch TV should be balanced with the time for outdoor activities. Although You can learn alot of different knowledge through thematicTV channels like cooking, maths , shopping,watching TV too much will be harmful tho health.

0977589905 said:

mấy chỗ bạn sử có chính xác 100% ko

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Mình có sửa lại rồi.Bạn xem lại nha !
Còn về đúng mình chắc khoảng 95%.

0977589905 said:

hello , everyone . My name is ......I'M 12 year old. I'm study class 6E at Le Binh secondary school . Do you know?TV is very important to everyone . When we sit in front of the TV with the remote in hand , we can easily connect to the world through the screen . it's very convenient . You definitely like watching TV , right? . That's right , because TV has so many useful programs . Many people tell me that watching TV is not good , but TV also has great benefits . Sau đây tôi sẽ giới thiệu cho các bạn một số chương trình . VTV1 gives us more knowledge about daily news . This is a news . On VTV2 and VTV3 there are often entertaining programs. You always remember that watch time is the most important and you should spend more time outdoors. You can learn alot of different knowledge through thematicTV channels like cooking, maths , shopping,...Beside,watching TV much will be harmful tho health.
nhờ mọi người nhận xét giúp mình ạ
có chỗ nào sai sót sửa cho mình lun
rồi viết thêm cho mình về tác hại khi xem nhiều TV luôn , viết ngắn thôi nha

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Hello, everyone. My name is ...... I'm 12 years old. I study class 6E at Le Binh secondary school. Do you know?TV is very important to everyone. When we sit in front of the TV with the remote in hand, we can easily connect to the world through the screen. It's very convenient. You definitely like watching TV, right? That's right because the TV has so many useful programs. Many people tell me that watching TV is not good, but TV also has great benefits. Sau đây tôi sẽ giới thiệu cho các bạn một số chương trình. VTV1 gives us more knowledge about the daily news. This is news. On VTV2 and VTV3 there are often entertaining programs. You always remember that watch time is the most important and you should spend more time outdoors. You can learn a lot of different knowledge through thematicTV channels like cooking, maths, shopping,... watching TV much will be harmful to health.
em dùng gg dịch và dịch sót 1 câu, chưa chuyển sang tiếng anh e nhé
sau từ right em cũng bỏ dấu phẩy nha
à..a lot of em k được viết liền alot nha

0977589905 said:

I'm study class 6E at Le Binh secondary school

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Trần Hoàng Hạ Đan said:

I study class 6E at Le Binh secondary school

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I study in class 6E at Le Binh secondary school

0977589905 said:

Do you know?TV is very important to everyone

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Trần Hoàng Hạ Đan said:

Do you know?TV is very important to everyone.

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Do you know that TV is very important to everyone . (câu này mình đồng ý như bạn @ngoxuanthanh1977@gmail.com)

Trần Hoàng Hạ Đan said:

That's right because the TV has so many useful programs

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theo mình thì không cần thiết phải thêm the trước TV đâu

0977589905 said:

Many people tell me that watching TV is not good , but TV also has great benefits

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Many people tell me that watching TV is not good , but in my opinion TV also has great benefits (sửa câu này như @ngoxuanthanh1977@gmail.com nha)

0977589905 said:

Sau đây tôi sẽ giới thiệu cho các bạn một số chương trình

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And here I will introduce you some programs

0977589905 said:

VTV1 gives us more knowledge about daily news . This is a news

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câu "this is a news cho vào đoạn là sao nhỉ mình không hiểu lắm. Theo mình thì bỏ câu "This is a news" đi

0977589905 said:

VTV1 gives us more knowledge about daily news

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thêm "the" phía trước "daily news" như @Trần Hoàng Hạ Đan đã sửa

0977589905 said:

You always remember that watch time is the most important and you should spend more time outdoors.

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.However,You should remember that the time you spend to watch TV should be balanced with the time for outdoor activities (đồng ý với @ngoxuanthanh1977@gmail.com )

0977589905 said:

You can learn alot of different knowledge through thematicTV channels like cooking, maths , shopping,...Beside,watching TV much will be harmful tho health.

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You can learn a lot of different knowledge through thematicTV channels like cooking, maths , shopping,...But watching TV too much will be harmful for your healt[TEX][/TEX]h

hoàn chỉnh:
Hello, everyone. My name is ...... I'm 12 years old. I study in class 6E at Le Binh secondary school.Do you know that TV is very important to everyone .When we sit in front of the TV with the remote in hand , we can easily connect to the world through the screen . it's very convenient . You definitely like watching TV , right? . That's right , because TV has so many useful programs .Many people tell me that watching TV is not good , but in my opinion TV also has great benefits .And here, I will introduce you some programs. VTV1 gives us more knowledge about the daily news.On VTV2 and VTV3 there are often entertaining programs.However,You should remember that the time you spend to watch TV should be balanced with the time for outdoor activities.You can learn a lot of different knowledge through thematicTV channels like cooking, maths , shopping,...But watching TV too much will be harmful to your health

Đ.Hà Linh☆ said:

câu "this is a news cho vào đoạn là sao nhỉ mình không hiểu lắm. Theo mình thì bỏ câu "This is a news" đi

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mình nghĩ chắc là ý bạn ấy muốn nói kiểu :" VTV1 cho chúng ta thêm nhiều kiến thức về tin tức hàng ngày. Đó là thời sự" Mình cũng chỉ đoán vậy thôi còn không biết bạn kia ntn :3