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Samurai sentai Shinkenger​

Introduction:

For eighteen generations,the samurais of the Shiba House have suppressed the evil intentions of the Gedoushu. Now, they come back and menace the human world's peace again.

However , the eighteenth leader of Shiba Clan - Shiba Takeru and his vassales appeared and prevented them . A great war happen. What wil occur with destiny of world?

To be continue ^^

 

[thien0526]

I think you have some problems in using tenses

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Samurai sentai Shinkenger​

Intruction:

For eighteen generations,the samurais of the Shiba House have suppressed the evil intentions of the Gedoushu. But now, they come back and menace the human world's peace again.

However , the eighteenth leader of Shiba Clan - Shiba Takeru and his vassals have been appearing and preventing them . A great war has happened. What will occur with the destiny of world?

You are introducing a film, aren't you?

 

[mickeykhotinh]

You are introducing a film, don't you?=> A tag question
So you must use: You are introducing a film, aren't you?

 

[vy000]

thien0526 : Can you use Vietnamese to explain me why you fixed likes that?

You are introducing a film, don't you?

Yes , I'm ^^ .Shinkenger is the best film I has watched . It is 33th seri in Super sentai seri (A seri film is produced by Toei Company). The word "sentai" means "fighting team" . Super sentai(ss) was first introduced in 1975 . The first team called "Himitsu sentai goranger" (secret team goranger) . Ss is my love , my lives . In our country,Some famous super sentai seri are Gaoranger , Dekaranger , Hurricanger ,...
In Vietnam , super sentai called Sieu nhan and is known as a film for kid :| . That take me to sad .



Character:

Shiba Takeru/ShinkenRed : He is the 18th leader of Shiba Clan. He was took care by Hikoma Kusakabe (jemadar of Shiba House) to become a Shinkenger (a true samurai).
Takeru is warriors who has the most mojikara in Shinkenger (mojikara is a kinds of power , same as chakka in Naruto Manga) . He also is strongest warriors . His special weapon is RekkaDaizandou , a jumbo sword which only takeru can use . Rekkadaizandou is transformed from Shinken maru - the sword which is used by Shinkenger

Shinkenred

Rekkadaizandou:

Shinkenmaru

 

[thien0526]

Can you use Vietnamese to explain me why you fixed likes that?

I've used the Present Perfect and Present Perfect Continuous because the activities you talked started in the past and have continued up until now, may be in the future

I am too amazed to hear that you like watching Super sentai while you are a girl, all right? I also like watching it, too; but when I was a child. I like to see them transform, use their power to prevent the devils and install the huge machines. It's so great

 

[vy000]

Is my introduction (about Shinkenred) perfect?

I am too amazed to hear that you like watching Super sentai while you are a girl, all right?

Many people said that , too ^^ . Hobby donn't distinguish age , sex (@_@) ^^. If you fall in love Super sentai , you will find quintessences of it . I have spent some many for sentai robot(gattai) ^^.But they are beautyful , big and transform very well (I'm saying about Bandai's toy , not chinese toy). Now I have a big collection of gattai ^^ (including Gaoranger , Dekaranger ,shinkenger and some other seri)





The next character:

Ikenami Ryunosuke/ShinkenBlue : He is advisor of Shinkenger .He has a absolute loyalty . His dream is becaming a kabuki actor but then he became a shinkenger. His special weapon is WaterBow- a archery which can shoot ice arrow . WaterBow í transformed from shinkenmaru ,too.

Shinkenblue

WaterBow

 

[depvazoi]

Mako Shiraishi / ShinkenPink (白石 茉 子 / シンケン ピンク, Mako Shiraishi / Shinken Pinku)

Mako is a lenient, gentle and young girl. She used to work in childcare before being a member of shinkenger. She is regarded as the eldest sister of the group. Her special strength is wind, she uses a fan to deploy this strength. This fan called Heaven Fan.

Shinken Pink:

Heaven Fan:

Kame Origami: Shinken Pink's machine, it is a circle in the form of God Kanji character. In a type of animal, it's a turtle. Kame Origami assembles right arm of Shinken Oh.