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[khanhngoc_61]

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Bài này là giới thiệu về bản thân, gia đình, và ngôi trường, ai giỏi anh giúp mình sửa với, cảm ơn trước:
" I am so glad to say a little bit about myself. My name is Phan Thi Khanh Ngoc. I’m in grade 7, class 71, Kien Giang Secondary School. My family has five people: my parents, my elder and younger brother, and me. My father is an office. He works in a company. My mother is a shopkeeper, she works in a store. My elder brother is a student, he is studying at Quang Binh University. My younger brother is studying at Kien Giang primary school number 1. I love my family so much.
About my school, it’s a very beautiful school. It’s has 570 students and 8 classroom. My school has many trees and flowers. In my school, I can learn many subject such as: Physics, English, Geography,… I love my school very much.
In many subject, I really love English. It’s very fun and interesting. I hope I can speak English fluently one day. Finally, I hope all of you fine and have many lucky in the life. "
Mong các bạn hết lòng giúp đỡ

 

[one_day]

"I am so glad to say a little bit about myself. My name is Phan Thi Khanh Ngoc. I’m in grade 7, class 71, Kien Giang Secondary School. My family has five people: my parents, my elder and younger brother, and me. My father is an office (office: văn phòng, từ đúng phải là "officer"). He works in a company. My mother is a shopkeeper, she works in a store. My elder brother is a student, he is studying at Quang Binh University. My younger brother is studying at Kien Giang primary school in grade 1. I love my family so much.
About my school, it’s a very beautiful school. It’s has 570 students and 8 classroom. My school has many trees and flowers. In my school, I can learn many subject such as: Physics, English, Geography,… I love my school very much.
In many subject, I really love English. It’s very fun and interesting. I hope I can speak English fluently one day. Finally, I hope all of you fine and have many lucks (sau many là danh từ) in the life. "

 

[cfchn]

Mình đã đọc qua bài của bạn. Mình nghĩ bạn nên bổ sung thêm vài thông tin về bản thân: Sở thích, tính tình, ngoài hình...
Chứ bài viết giới thiệu bản thân mà chỉ thấy có mỗi tên tuổi , còn lại toàn gia đình trường học...

Hy vọng bạn sửa và hoàn chỉnh lại bài viết rồi chúng ta thảo luận tiếp :v
Chúc bạn có thể nói tốt bài giới thiệu này!

 

[khanhngoc_61]

Mình đã đọc qua bài của bạn. Mình nghĩ bạn nên bổ sung thêm vài thông tin về bản thân: Sở thích, tính tình, ngoài hình...
Chứ bài viết giới thiệu bản thân mà chỉ thấy có mỗi tên tuổi , còn lại toàn gia đình trường học...

Hy vọng bạn sửa và hoàn chỉnh lại bài viết rồi chúng ta thảo luận tiếp :v
Chúc bạn có thể nói tốt bài giới thiệu này!

Vì trình độ cấp THCS nên cũng không cần phải cụ thể hóa lắm ^^

 

[khanhngoc_61]

"I am so glad to say a little bit about myself. My name is Phan Thi Khanh Ngoc. I’m in grade 7, class 71, Kien Giang Secondary School. My family has five people: my parents, my elder and younger brother, and me. My father is an office (office: văn phòng, từ đúng phải là "officer"). He works in a company. My mother is a shopkeeper, she works in a store. My elder brother is a student, he is studying at Quang Binh University. My younger brother is studying at Kien Giang primary school in grade 1. I love my family so much.
About my school, it’s a very beautiful school. It’s has 570 students and 8 classroom. My school has many trees and flowers. In my school, I can learn many subject such as: Physics, English, Geography,… I love my school very much.
In many subject, I really love English. It’s very fun and interesting. I hope I can speak English fluently one day. Finally, I hope all of you fine and have many lucks (sau many là danh từ) in the life. "

Chỗ Kien Giang primary school là mình chỉ giới thiệu về trường (truờng tiểu học số 1 Kiến Giang) chứ không giới thiệu lớp ^^

 

[congchuahoahong2000]

minh da doc bai cua ban theo minh o cho ban viet'' my father works in a company'' thi ban nên sua thanh'' my father works at a company''...........vi gioi tu '' in'' thi di voi dia diem lon con gioi tu '' at'' di voi dia diem nho

 

[katyperry_nhat]

Bài này là giới thiệu về bản thân, gia đình, và ngôi trường, ai giỏi anh giúp mình sửa với, cảm ơn trước:
" I am so glad to say a little bit about myself. My name is Phan Thi Khanh Ngoc. I’m in grade 7, class 71, Kien Giang Secondary School. (1)My family has five people: my parents, my elder and younger brother, and me. My father is an office. He works in a company. My mother is a shopkeeper, she works in a store. My elder brother is a student, he is studying at Quang Binh University. My younger brother is studying at (2)Kien Giang primary school number 1. I love my family so much.
About my school, it’s a very beautiful school. (3)It’s has 570 students and 8 classroom. (4)My school has many trees and flowers. In my school, (5)I can learn many subject such as: Physics, English, Geography,… I love my school very much.
In many subject, I really love English. It’s very fun and interesting. I hope I can speak English fluently one day. Finally, (8)I hope all of you fine and have (7)many lucky in the life. "
Mong các bạn hết lòng giúp đỡ

(1): Bạn nên nói là There are five people in my family
(2): ko sai nhưng nên viết là KG primary school No.1
(3),(4): bạn nên sử dụng cấu trúc
There is/ there are . Như vậy nó hay hơn
(5) I learn many subjects at school, such as .......
(6)Nếu để môn học yêu thích ở trên, rồi cho I love my school very much xuống dưới
(7)Lucky đến được sao?!
(8)I hope you guys fine, happy and study hard. Thanks for listening

P/s: bài viết rất hay, tuy nhiên ko phải câu nào cũng như tiếng viết, tránh word by word