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WONDER WOMAN
The role of the women in our life are bigger and more important these days. Being a working mother is the most special ability of a woman in 21st century. Firstly, being a working mother will being respected. A woman who does both raising money and house watching is a kind of a super power. Not only taking the same jobs as the men, women still finish their work at home as a mother or as a wife nearly perfectly. Second, those independent ladies will help the husband with solving financial problem by working hard out there. Nowadays, the jobs that every one used to think “it is only for men” like police, firefighter or a president are no longer. Many female fire fighter or president has contributed a lot to the community. The thinking of modern girls are more clear, they realized how necessary to stand up, take the chance to take part in a good university. Finally, the last advantage is that you have set a good example for children. There is a quote like this “The children is just the reflection of their parent”. They will grow up with a wide mind that they know what their mother have done for them. In conclusion, working mothers inspire a lot to young girl and specially helping make the community better.

Mn xem em cần sửa chỗ nào không và điền hộ em vào tờ bên dưới nha

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KLam0610

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WONDER WOMAN
The role of the women in our life are bigger and more important these days. Being a working mother is the most special ability of a woman in 21st century. Firstly, being a working mother will being respected. A woman who does both raising money and house watching is a kind of a super power. Not only taking the same jobs as the men, women still finish their work at home as a mother or as a wife nearly perfectly. Second, those independent ladies will help the husband with solving financial problem by working hard out there. Nowadays, the jobs that every one used to think “it is only for men” like police, firefighter or a president are no longer. Many female fire fighter or president has contributed a lot to the community. The thinking of modern girls are more clear, they realized how necessary to stand up, take the chance to take part in a good university. Finally, the last advantage is that you have set a good example for children. There is a quote like this “The children is just the reflection of their parent”. They will grow up with a wide mind that they know what their mother have done for them. In conclusion, working mothers inspire a lot to young girl and specially helping make the community better.

Mn xem em cần sửa chỗ nào không và điền hộ em vào tờ bên dưới nha

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our life is -> our lives are
21st -> the 21st
will being respected -> will be respected
a super power -> superpower
financial -> a/the financial
every one -> everyone
fire fighter -> firefighter
the children is -> the children are
their mother have -> their mothers have
bạn tham khảo nha :)
 
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