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Topicrofessional sports people are often idolised by young children.Some people think that they,there for, have a responsility to be good role models at all time for children:
In our world,there are a lots of people have their idols especially teenagers and children such as bnds,football players, singers,...and among them ther are also some personal think that their idols must have responsibility to be good role models at all time for children or teenagers.I disagree with this opinion for 2 reason.
First and foremost,we have to have a good awareness about our idols.Why?Why d oyou called a person is your idol?They asre different from we.They always have to do the interesting action when you look at them.They also have to work exactly,carefully and try their best to be famous.But they have their personal life too.They don't have the mission of doing good as a famous star at all time , every place and always yours role model.
Then, in my opinion, having and idol is make us try tot follow our dream that become oour idol.To illstrute, we try to learn English or another languages to meet our idols and talk with them, we study or idol's character, how d othey eat,...ect.Actually, with today real organs, ther are many teenagers killed ther idol or learn their bad habits that they read on Facebook, Instagram,...It's wrong.We admire them bacause their good hbits or their cute, their bahaviour.So we shouldn't take the bad habits of our idols to blame fr them.
In conclusion, Having an idol is not bad but we must know exactly about our idol, choose the best thing of them to learn.
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[minhthu2k5]

In our world,there are a lots=>a lot of people have their idols especially teenagers and children such as bands,football players, singers,...and among them there are also some personal (ý là sao nhỉ? ) think that their idols must have responsibility to be good role models at all time for children or teenagers.I disagree with this opinion for 2 reason=>reasons.
First and foremost,we have to have a good awareness about =>of our idols.Why?Why do you called=>call a person is your idol?They are different from we.They always have to do an interesting activity when you look at them.They also have to work exactly,carefully and try their best to be famous.But they have their personal life too.They don't have the mission of doing good as a famous star at all time , every place and always your role model.
Then, in my opinion, having an idol is to make us try to follow our dream that becomes our idol.To illustrate, we try to learn English or other languages to meet our idols and talk with them, we study or idol's character, how do they eat,...ect.Actually, with today real organs, there are many teenagers killed their idol or learn their bad habits that they read on Facebook, Instagram,...It's wrong.We admire them because of their good habits or their appearance, their bahaviour.So we shouldn't take the bad habits of our idols to blame for them.
In conclusion, Having an idol is not bad but we must know exactly about our idol, choose the best thing of them to learn.

 

[Phạm Dương]

In our world, there are a lot of people have their idols especially teenagers and children such as bands, football players, singers,...and among them, they are also some personal think that their idols must have a responsibility to be good role models at all time for children or teenagers. I disagree with this opinion for 2 reasons.
First and foremost, we have to have a good awareness of our idols. Why? (Văn viết thì ít dùng câu hỏi như này em nhé) Why do you call a person is your idol? They are different from us. They always have to do an interesting activity when you look at them. They also have to work exactly, carefully and try their best to be famous. But they have their personal life too. They don't have the mission of doing good as a famous star at all time, every place and always your role model.
Then, in my opinion, having an idol is to make us try to follow our dream that becomes our idol. To illustrate, we try to learn English or other languages to meet our idols and talk with them, we study or idol's character, how do they eat,...etc.Actually, with today real organs, there are many teenagers killed their idol or learn the bad habits that they read on Facebook, Instagram,...It's wrong. We admire them because of their good habits or their cute (???), their behaviour. So we shouldn't take the bad habits of our idols to blame for them.
In conclusion, Having an idol is not bad but we must know exactly about our idol, choose the best thing of them to learn

 

[Đông Phương Thiên Thu]

In our world,there are a lots=>a lot of people have their idols especially teenagers and children such as bands,football players, singers,...and among them there are also some personal (ý là sao nhỉ? ) think that their idols must have responsibility to be good role models at all time for children or teenagers.I disagree with this opinion for 2 reason=>reasons.
First and foremost,we have to have a good awareness about =>of our idols.Why?Why do you called=>call a person is your idol?They are different from we.They always have to do an interesting activity when you look at them.They also have to work exactly,carefully and try their best to be famous.But they have their personal life too.They don't have the mission of doing good as a famous star at all time , every place and always your role model.
Then, in my opinion, having an idol is to make us try to follow our dream that becomes our idol.To illustrate, we try to learn English or other languages to meet our idols and talk with them, we study or idol's character, how do they eat,...ect.Actually, with today real organs, there are many teenagers killed their idol or learn their bad habits that they read on Facebook, Instagram,...It's wrong.We admire them because of their good habits or their appearance, their bahaviour.So we shouldn't take the bad habits of our idols to blame for them.
In conclusion, Having an idol is not bad but we must know exactly about our idol, choose the best thing of them to learn.

mk muốn ns là một số cá nhân nha

In our world, there are a lot of people have their idols especially teenagers and children such as bands, football players, singers,...and among them, they are also some personal think that their idols must have a responsibility to be good role models at all time for children or teenagers. I disagree with this opinion for 2 reasons.
First and foremost, we have to have a good awareness of our idols. Why? (Văn viết thì ít dùng câu hỏi như này em nhé) Why do you call a person is your idol? They are different from us. They always have to do an interesting activity when you look at them. They also have to work exactly, carefully and try their best to be famous. But they have their personal life too. They don't have the mission of doing good as a famous star at all time, every place and always your role model.
Then, in my opinion, having an idol is to make us try to follow our dream that becomes our idol. To illustrate, we try to learn English or other languages to meet our idols and talk with them, we study or idol's character, how do they eat,...etc.Actually, with today real organs, there are many teenagers killed their idol or learn the bad habits that they read on Facebook, Instagram,...It's wrong. We admire them because of their good habits or their cute (???), their behaviour. So we shouldn't take the bad habits of our idols to blame for them.
In conclusion, Having an idol is not bad but we must know exactly about our idol, choose the best thing of them to learn

e cảm ơn nhìu ạ... theo cj thì e vt vậy có thể coi là đúng nội dung chủ đề chưa cj???

 

[Phạm Dương]

e cảm ơn nhìu ạ... theo cj thì e vt vậy có thể coi là đúng nội dung chủ đề chưa cj???

Về lí do thứ 2 của em thì chị đang thấy nó hơi vô lí với lí do 1 một chút: ở lí do 1: các thần tượng có cuộc sống riêng của họ, họ không phải con người hoàn mĩ. Thì đến lí do 2, em lại nói là chúng tôi ngưỡng mộ họ bởi cách sống với thói quen, cái này chị nghĩ là em nên thay đổi thành kiểu: họ có những hành động đẹp đáng để học tập theo, hay họ đã cổ vũ chúng tôi có thể làm những gì, cái này cần có những minh chứng thực tế thì tốt hơn, nhưng trong fandom bên chị thì mọi người ủng hộ tiền, sách vở để xây dựng trường học và thư viện cho trẻ em nghèo, đó là một ví dụ thực tế, và điều này khẳng định quan điểm của em tốt hơn

 

[minhthu2k5]

mk muốn ns là một số cá nhân nha

Nhưng personal là tính từ mà, làm sao có thể dùng như thế được, theo mình bạn có thể đổi thành some individuals