Check lỗi ngữ pháp của đoạn văn: Advantages and disadvantages in big city

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Today, city is the trend of living place of almost people in every country. And the government also want to build more city in their country. As the result, project of urbanization always attracts company and government to invest. But every field has two side of it. Living in big city isn't always good. Today I will talk to you about the advantages and disadvantages that have in big city. First of all, the economy will be raise if your country has more and more city. It is always true. The big city will be a place to improve the industry and service. There are a lot of works in big city. You can be a doctor, a engineer, a nurse, … That’s why many people from countryside want to move to big city to earn more money. In big city,there are many intellectual works and it will attract many smart people move to here to live and work. And the trend of works on global now is intellectual works so that's why the big city always has a large economy. So as the result, big city will have many services like healthcare, education, drinking, … About healthcare, big city always has good healthcare. Why ? Because there are many good doctors from all country. And what thing is attracted they ? Yes it is a good salary because big city has a lot of money to spend to healthcare. So many good doctors come to big city to have a good salary. But it isn't just doctor from other place, in that city have a lot of doctor. And how ? They will make it by building a lot of university in big city and try to make education better. You should remember they have much money and they will spend a lot of in education. There are many big city in world have good education such as Cambridge, Massachusetts with Harvard University – the best university in the world, Oxford, England with Oxford University, New Haven, Connecticut with Yale University,… Many companies want to invest to build a big university in big city for children from rich family to learn. They will be taught in famous university with good infranstructure and learnt from famous professor from all over the world. The young kids can have many exercises for improving creation, improving thinking. They will be able to learn the best things for them. So the education in big city is very good and it will be more and more growth in the future. So everyone thinks that living in city is better than countryside. But in other hand, big city has a lot of problems. First, if you live in big city, you will know that the air is very polluted. I really sure that you have heard this once in television. The air is heavily polluted with many dust in air. The reason is big city very lean on industry especially machinery manufacturing industry, textile industry, … So factories must be built to provide place to work those industry. But factories release a lot of carbon dioxide so the air in big city is very very polluted such as Beijing, Tehran, New Delhi, … In some big city, government encourage people go out at least as much as possible. I know in some modern big city people build many park, lakes and also modern system to stop the carbon dioxide at least. But it is just a very little in many big cities in the world there are a lot of polluting air. Second, the big city has a lot of slums especially New Delhi. Why ? Because in big city has many poor people. Ok I know you will say: " What do you means ? You say that big city has so large economy Why there are poor people ?" I must say to you that in big city there are a lot of social classes from poor to rich. It is so diverse. So rich people live in skycrapers, large villas or modern flats. And poor people live in a slum. Because they don’t have place to go. 'Cause big city is overcrowded so they don’t have place to live. And last but not least, big city has a lot of crimes. Crimes find that they can make a lot of money in big city. Because they have a lot of money so they will be able to buy their services such as drugs, killing,… So crimes work very usually in big cities. In conclusion, not just in big city wherever we live has its advantages and disadvantages. So we need to know its advantages and disadvantages to live most comfortable for yourself. Goodbye and see you next time !
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Today, city is the trend of living place of -> the living trend of (sắp xếp hợp lí) almost people in every country. And the government also want to build more city-> cities in their country. As the result, project of urbanization-> urbanization projects always attracts-> bỏ s vì trước số nhiều company-> companies and government to invest. But every field has two side-> sides of it. Living in big city isn't always good. Today I will talk to you about the advantages and disadvantages that have in big city. First of all, the economy will be raise if your country has more and more city-> cities. It is always true. The big city will be a place to improve the-> devolop (nghĩa của câu sẽ rõ hơn) industry and service-> services. There are a lot of works in big city. You can be a doctor, a engineer, a nurse, … That’s why many people from countryside want to move to big city-> cities to earn more money. In big city,there are many intellectual works and it will attract many smart people move to-> to move here to live and work. And the trend of works on global now is intellectual works so that's why the big city always has a large economy. So as the result-> Therefore (tránh lặp từ), big city-> cities will have many services like healthcare, education, drinking, … About healthcare, big city always has good services(làm rõ nghĩa). Why ? Because there are many good doctors from all country. And what thing is attracted they ? Yes it is a good salary because big city has a lot of money to spend to-> on health care. So many good doctors come to big city to have a good salary-> high salaries. But it isn't just doctor from other place, in that city have a lot of-> many doctors. And how?They will make it by building a lot of university->universities in big city and try to make education better. You should remember they have much money and they will spend a lot of in-> on education. There are many big city-> cities in the world have good education such as Cambridge, Massachusetts with Harvard University – the best university in the world, Oxford, England with Oxford University, New Haven, Connecticut with Yale University,…
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0916504895 said:

Today, city is the trend of living place of almost people in every country. And the government also want to build more city in their country. As the result, project of urbanization always attracts company and government to invest. But every field has two side of it. Living in big city isn't always good. Today I will talk to you about the advantages and disadvantages that have in big city. First of all, the economy will be raise if your country has more and more city. It is always true. The big city will be a place to improve the industry and service. There are a lot of works in big city. You can be a doctor, a engineer, a nurse, … That’s why many people from countryside want to move to big city to earn more money. In big city,there are many intellectual works and it will attract many smart people move to here to live and work. And the trend of works on global now is intellectual works so that's why the big city always has a large economy. So as the result, big city will have many services like healthcare, education, drinking, … About healthcare, big city always has good healthcare. Why ? Because there are many good doctors from all country. And what thing is attracted they ? Yes it is a good salary because big city has a lot of money to spend to healthcare. So many good doctors come to big city to have a good salary. But it isn't just doctor from other place, in that city have a lot of doctor. And how ? They will make it by building a lot of university in big city and try to make education better. You should remember they have much money and they will spend a lot of in education. There are many big city in world have good education such as Cambridge, Massachusetts with Harvard University – the best university in the world, Oxford, England with Oxford University, New Haven, Connecticut with Yale University,… Many companies want to invest to build a big university in big city for children from rich family to learn. They will be taught in famous university with good infranstructure and learnt from famous professor from all over the world. The young kids can have many exercises for improving creation, improving thinking. They will be able to learn the best things for them. So the education in big city is very good and it will be more and more growth in the future. So everyone thinks that living in city is better than countryside. But in other hand, big city has a lot of problems. First, if you live in big city, you will know that the air is very polluted. I really sure that you have heard this once in television. The air is heavily polluted with many dust in air. The reason is big city very lean on industry especially machinery manufacturing industry, textile industry, … So factories must be built to provide place to work those industry. But factories release a lot of carbon dioxide so the air in big city is very very polluted such as Beijing, Tehran, New Delhi, … In some big city, government encourage people go out at least as much as possible. I know in some modern big city people build many park, lakes and also modern system to stop the carbon dioxide at least. But it is just a very little in many big cities in the world there are a lot of polluting air. Second, the big city has a lot of slums especially New Delhi. Why ? Because in big city has many poor people. Ok I know you will say: " What do you means ? You say that big city has so large economy Why there are poor people ?" I must say to you that in big city there are a lot of social classes from poor to rich. It is so diverse. So rich people live in skycrapers, large villas or modern flats. And poor people live in a slum. Because they don’t have place to go. 'Cause big city is overcrowded so they don’t have place to live. And last but not least, big city has a lot of crimes. Crimes find that they can make a lot of money in big city. Because they have a lot of money so they will be able to buy their services such as drugs, killing,… So crimes work very usually in big cities. In conclusion, not just in big city wherever we live has its advantages and disadvantages. So we need to know its advantages and disadvantages to live most comfortable for yourself. Goodbye and see you next time !
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Today, city is the trend of living place of -> the living trend of (sắp xếp hợp lí) almost people in every country. And the government also want to build more city-> cities in their country. As the result, project of urbanization-> urbanization projects always attracts-> bỏ s vì trước số nhiều company-> companies and government to invest. But every field has two side-> sides of it. Living in big city isn't always good. Today I will talk to you about the advantages and disadvantages that have in big city. First of all, the economy will be raise if your country has more and more city-> cities. It is always true. The big city will be a place to improve the-> devolop (nghĩa của câu sẽ rõ hơn) industry and service-> services. There are a lot of works in big city. You can be a doctor, a engineer, a nurse, … That’s why many people from countryside want to move to big city-> cities to earn more money. In big city,there are many intellectual works and it will attract many smart people move to-> to move here to live and work. And the trend of works on global now is intellectual works so that's why the big city always has a large economy. So as the result-> Therefore (tránh lặp từ), big city-> cities will have many services like healthcare, education, drinking, … About healthcare, big city always has good services(làm rõ nghĩa). Why ? Because there are many good doctors from all country. And what thing is attracted they ? Yes it is a good salary because big city has a lot of money to spend to-> on health care. So many good doctors come to big city to have a good salary-> high salaries. But it isn't just doctor from other place, in that city have a lot of-> many doctors. And how?They will make it by building a lot of university->universities in big city and try to make education better. You should remember they have much money and they will spend a lot of in-> on education. There are many big city-> cities in the world have good education such as Cambridge, Massachusetts with Harvard University – the best university in the world, Oxford, England with Oxford University, New Haven, Connecticut with Yale University,…
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Today, the city is the trend of living place of almost people in every country. And the government also want to build more city in their country. As the result, a project of urbanization always attracts company and government to invest. But every field has two sides to it. Living in a big city isn't always good. Today I will talk to you about the advantages and disadvantages that have in the big city. First of all, the economy will be raised if your country has more and more city. It is always true. The big city will be a place to improve the industry and service. There are a lot of works in the big city. You can be a doctor, an engineer, a nurse, … That’s why many people from the countryside want to move to the big city to earn more money. In a big city, there are many intellectual works and it will attract many smart people to move to here to live and work. And the trend of works on global now is intellectual works so that's why the big city always has a large economy. So as the result, big city will have many services like healthcare, education, drinking, … About healthcare, the big city always has good healthcare. Why? Because there are many good doctors from all country. And what thing is attracted them? Yes, it is a good salary because the big city has a lot of money to spend on healthcare. So many good doctors come to the big city to have a good salary. But it isn't just a doctor from another place, in that city have a lot of doctors. And how? They will make it by building a lot of university in a big city and try to make education better. You should remember they have a lot of money and they will spend a lot of in education. There are many big cities in the world that have good education such as Cambridge, Massachusetts with Harvard University – the best university in the world, Oxford, England with Oxford University, New Haven, Connecticut with Yale University,… Many companies want to invest to build a big university in the big city for children from a rich family to learn. They will be taught infamous university with good infrastructure and learnt from a famous professor from all over the world. The young kids can have many exercises for improving creation, improving thinking. They will be able to learn the best things for themselves. So the education in a big city is very good and it will be more and more growth in the future. So everyone thinks that living in the city is better than the countryside. But on another hand, a big city has a lot of problems. First, if you live in a big city, you will know that the air is very polluted. I am really sure that you have heard this once on television. The air is heavily polluted with many specks of dust in the air. The reason is a big city very lean on the industry especially machinery manufacturing industry, textile industry, … So factories must be built to provide a place to work that industry. But factories release a lot of carbon dioxide so the air in a big city is very very polluted such as Beijing, Tehran, New Delhi, … In some big city, government encourage people to go out at least as much as possible. I know in some modern big city people build many park, lakes and also a modern system to stop the carbon dioxide at least. But it is just very little in many big cities in the world there is a lot of polluting air. Second, the big city has a lot of slums especially New Delhi. Why? Because in a big city has many poor people. Ok I know you will say: " What do you mean? You say that big city has so large economy Why there are poor people ?" I must say to you that in a big city there are a lot of social classes from poor to rich. It is so diverse. So rich people live in skyscrapers, large villas or modern flats. And poor people live in a slum. Because they don’t have a place to go. 'Cause big city is overcrowded so they don’t have a place to live. And last but not least, the big city has a lot of crimes. Crimes find that they can make a lot of money in the big city. Because they have a lot of money so they will be able to buy their services such as drugs, killing,… So crimes work very usually in big cities. In conclusion, not just in a big city wherever we live has its advantages and disadvantages. So we need to know its advantages and disadvantages to live most comfortable for ourselves. Goodbye and see you next timekhác!

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